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chasing rain
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0 posted 2001-08-29 03:54 PM


Epilogue

I took my first step outside of the world
Caused magic to rise, then tumbl'ing, it swirled.
Roses grew dim, they rusted with time
Thorns prickled the hand, that caressed its vine.

Most ancient of worlds, a canyon of sighs
In placid abyss among ravenous cries.
Clouds blocked the heavens and halos of light
Wingless, they fell, from infinite heights.

Knights of the Dead drew swords and their shields
Riding black horses through wood and through fields.
Menacing voices rang true from their steeds
And songs of the vile retold of their deeds.

Soldiers of kings too proud to give in
Wounded, their souls were forever within
Never to leave, yet half dead they live
With dreams of the wars that they forever relive.

I stood there in awe of this war raging world
With Death in my hands, I watched the Light twirl
Warring with foes, and brethren: their own
The sun and the moon were finally shown.

Imperfect crystals hung lifeless in caves
Broken, it seemed, its soul was a slave.
Tales of Dreams and wishes come true
Were nothing but Visions, Visions they drew.

I threw the dark book into feiry flames
This darkness had always been part of the games,
That light was a part of, as well as the soul
And torture of lives that were under control.

The flames in the fire glowed bright from the fuel
It crackled with pleasure, heartless and cruel.
The pages were worn, the writing exposed
The "dark materials" chapter was eternally closed.

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*ahem* Thus endeth the Dark Materials Chapter. Thank you to all who replied to the others. Your encouragement and comments were gratefully received.  
As for now, I have yet to cook up another idea...
Until my next post, adieu.  

°L.§.W.°

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

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Poet Unknown
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Missouri
1 posted 2001-08-29 04:03 PM


this was most excellent =o) i enjoyed it

Eternal agony, invisions of carnage, needles stabbing you in the eye, this is what its like when doves cry

Love's Addiction
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since 2001-06-21
Posts 57
all around you
2 posted 2001-08-29 07:26 PM


wow, i liked this alot, nice job.


Life is a waste of time, time is a waste of life, so be wasted all the time and have the time of ur life!!!
Don't EVER judge me - Slipknot

[This message has been edited by Love's Addiction (edited 08-29-2001).]

cherish
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since 2001-03-25
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swimming in fairy floss...........
3 posted 2001-08-29 08:46 PM


The pages were worn, the writing expose
The "dark materials" chapter was eternally closed.

awwwwwww.....man that sucks!!!..i really really enjoyed the series leah..they were one great bunch of poems!!...its sad...kinds anti-climactic that the book was burnt in the end...*sighs*.. ...but this piece is really well written and i have to say that i enjoyed reading this one as much as i did the rest...

Hurry up with the idea for the next series already!!!

Daffodils
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Kandi
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North of Hell
4 posted 2001-08-29 10:04 PM


Wow....great ending to an awesome set of poems...kinda sad that it's over  
Anywho, what a gift with words you have...I love the ending of this one - very powerful. I can't wait for your next big idea! Keep up the creativity  
*hugs!*

fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15
Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia
5 posted 2001-08-29 10:49 PM


Ooooooh!!  Can't believe I missed the others in the series.  *sigh* Looks like I'll have to read them from the beginning, 'cause this it too good not to have the full story behind it.

I agree with everyone here about the ending too.  Greatastic job!

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

Android 17
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6 posted 2001-08-30 02:50 AM


Wow, Leah! You never cease to amaze me! I can't beleive I came at the end...oh, well it serves me right for not coming sooner like you said!

Really, good...EXCELLENT poem! I just hope youcheck out mine when I post'em!

anonymousfemale
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Limbo
7 posted 2001-08-30 11:27 AM


You're closing the series? Like hell you are! Write some more of these!  

What an amazing piece. Definitely a fitting ending to a splendid series. Your flow was terrific UNTIL you hit the second last stanza. Now this could have just been the way I was reading it but I found it to be all out of whack with the rest of the piece.
Anyway, I'll give you an indepth review of this tomorrow. I'm way too tired to think now. EJ needs sleep.

~AF~

I'm a little teapot, short and stout! Here is my handle, here is my spout. *toot toot*

keoni
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Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC
8 posted 2001-08-30 12:26 PM


Awesome conclusion. I really liked this series. Very thought out, detailed poems. Hope to see another cool series come along soon.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

chasing rain
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Posts 737
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9 posted 2001-08-30 05:54 PM


Poet Unknown, Love's Addiction, and Kandi- Glad you liked it, thanks for reading!  

Cherish- Sorry, had to burn the book...what else was i supposed to do with it?   Oh, yeah...read it again! ^_^

Sean- Yeah, you should be ashamed of yourself for missing all them other ones! FOR SHAME!!!!!!! hehe.  
  
Android 17- Yeah, shame on you too for coming at the end! SHAME! And of course I'll check out yours. Why wouldn't I?  

EJ- Yes, I'm closing THIS series. There's going to be *cough* another *cough* one. *hack*   You may or may not see it soon...
The second last stanza is a little weird, but if you read it a certain way, it works. ^_^ Thanks for commenting though, but sleep should always come first. Jah? ^_____^

Jon- This series did take a lot of time to think out...there was this huge time span between #4 and #5 because I lost all sense of poetry. hehe.  

Thanks again to everyone!

°L.§.W.°

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

anonymous albert ?
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10 posted 2001-09-06 12:40 PM


"Wounded, their souls were forever within
Never to leave, yet half dead they live"

God *beeeep*...this was awesome...and those lines hit me out of the ball park! ...and you eneded the series the ebst way possible...EVEN though imma miss it...you know? the dark side of Leah...muhahah.. ...*sighs* HeHe...buh bye

if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry-

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