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Changing to be the same |
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punkyfreak New Member
since 2001-08-28
Posts 6 |
As I stare ahead of me, (blankly it must seem) the clock stops. Out of all the times I wished it had, it insists on stopping now, at a time I want to pass, a time of confusion, at a time of self doubt. As I stare I start to wonder, unable to glance over at you, if you too are scared, staring not so blankly, as confused as I am, and equally frustrated at that damn clock as it stares, unmoving and silent. I want to scream, stomp my feet, do anything to wake the clock. Because without it's previously montonous ticking, I am left alone in a room full of talking people. They are talking about seemingly empty, trivial events. Suddenly I am ripped away from consciousnessinto a land to which I have lost the map. A land that is just the same old me on the outside, but a trembling mess down deep inside. Without my map I stumble blindly through my thoughts. Tripping over secrets I know too well. They are hidden unsder layers of shame, doubt, and lies. Secrets that reach up, up through those thick layers, at me. I could cry in this instince of truth. These secrets are painful beasts, and once unleashed they devour my mind, spirit and soul. These secrets are unspoken, they are personal, and make up every aspect of my existence. They secrets are me. I can't control them anymore. I've lostall control of everything. As the clocke starts awaken it jerks, andI blink. I am gently taken from the land of my wounded soul, and placed back in the classroom. I realize everyone but you and I are attentively listening, and occasionally responding to questions that arebeing thrown at them. I dodge every question, my eyes are fixed on the face of the clock. I shake my head disapointingly, twenty more minutes until i can disapear. Still focusing on the clock, I can't seem to look away. i feel tears form in the back of my eyes. I want to tell you who I am, I want to tell everyone. But it is too hard and painful to tell even my self. I finally glance at you after all my anguish the clock has finally reached a time I can agree with. The bell rings and I slip away and disapear into the flood of people. *written 05/08/01 By Trista Martin |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Very good! Especially for your first post! I have been in those situations when you just can't let the real you out, because you fear yourself. I have been thru it many times before. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Great first post. Welcome to passions! This poem was very dark and I really liked it. Great imagery, I hope to see more soon. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow.....this is really a great first post. I am definately looking forward to more from you  WELCOME! Please check your email for a special greeting ~SEA"I know you, I walked with you once upon a dream" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! Well done on your first post. The title really caught my eye and the poem was great. I enjoyed it a lot. SEA beat me to great you which is bad cuz I haven't been doing my Moderating duties due to college......man...haha well welcome to passions and I hope to see you post more in the future.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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SunShine913
since 2001-08-19
Posts 211Italy but from NC |
WELCOME to passions im sure you will love it here as much as i do! I LOVED THIS for your first post it was awsome! keep posting i wanna read more!! :exorcist:!~Andrea~!:exorcist: |
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Poet Unknown Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 140Missouri |
this is a very good first post, better than mine =o) lookin forward to more from ya Only darkness falls on those without souls |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! It's great to see you here I'm happy that youve decided to join us here in Passions for Poetry Your work is very impressive and I'd love to see more in the future I hope you enjoy PIP as we much as we all do hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma |
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punkyfreak New Member
since 2001-08-28
Posts 6 |
Thank you for all your kind replys. I have to admit I am bit nervous to post anything new after all your praise. So don't be diapointed if my next post sort of sucks, I although am a drama geek at heart have terrible stage fright, and when i am not actually on stage ,it is worse. ~Me |
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punkyfreak New Member
since 2001-08-28
Posts 6 |
Thank you for all your kind replys. I have to admit I am bit nervous to post anything new after all your praise. So don't be diapointed if my next post sort of sucks, I although am a drama geek at heart have terrible stage fright, and when i am not actually on stage ,it is worse. ~Me |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
 WELCOME TO PIP! Shame on me, I'm INCREDIBLY late replying. I'm sorry. I've been busy. But WOW!  This is SOOooo Well written. Wow! an incredible first post. I loved it bunches upon bunches. HAHa, don't have stage fright! And don't TRY to outdo your first post...Write what you feel- cause dman you do it well. Hope to see more posts and replies from you very soon! You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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