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paladin

Senior Member

since 2001-08-05

Posts 930
Pensacola,Fl.

0 posted 2001-08-28 03:31 PM

Her mother never gave her
the love she craved
Pushed her away when she
asked for kisses
All through her childhood
her dolls were saved
Tea parties with tiny dishes

Too soon she grew up
to be a teen
She wanted love never
knowing what it meant
She flirted with a boy
He was heven sent
He said that he loved her
This shallow teen
In her desparation
she hatched a plan
To show him she loved him
by giving in
It was not beautiful
She did not understand
It hurt her and she felt
full of sin
She never let him touch
her again

The months went by and
her body acted odd
She got sick in the morning
and her clothes would not fit
Putting on weight?Asked her mother
She lowered her head with a nod

Soon she could no
longer hid it
Her mother had a wild
screaming fit
Abortion never
She will have the child
Send her to her aunt
to hid her shame

She pats her tummy
My baby she smiled
Tiny garments just
like her doll's things
Making list after lists
of baby's names

The first labor pains
made her head ring
She was not ready to
end childhood games
Cold rooms,bright lights
and muffled voices
Why can't I hold my
new baby son?

Her mother stood at
the end of her bed
A woman in a suit said
It is not yours to keep
Nooooo!
she screamed and cried
her eyes red
They gave her a shot
to make her sleep

Alone in her bed room
There in the dark
Crying and hugging
her favorate doll
Her face some how older
With life's cruel mark
To think seeking love
was her only down fall

paladin

[This message has been edited by paladin (edited 08-29-2001).]

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-08-28 03:54 PM

my God, I'd have to kill someone if they even tried to take one of my kids away. Man, this went right to this mother's heart. grrrrrrr.

very well done.

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

2 posted 2001-08-28 04:20 PM

This is so terribly sad.

Very well written tho. Good work.

Jenn

"Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

3 posted 2001-08-28 07:41 PM

wow robert!...i know that the situation was pretty cliched but in all honesty you did a mighty fine job of this one i have to say! i enjoyed this one heaps thanks for sharing im looking forward to more from you!

WHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHY!?!?!

-beacuse.

RoseThorn
New Member

since 2001-08-28

Posts 5
US - NY

4 posted 2001-08-28 08:03 PM

Dear Paladin,
you're poem is very touching. it goes straight home and reaches the heart. very well written!

Barelybreathing
Junior Member

since 2000-04-26

Posts 46

5 posted 2001-08-29 12:52 PM

you described this so well..a very good poem that touched my heart cos my best friend has just gone through all that and its so sad that society can be so cruel....

'The greatest thing in the world is to know how to be one's own.'
~Montaigne~

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-08-29 01:37 PM

Very well written paladin. I truly did appreciate but it's nothing i can relate to for I am a man.....anyhow, I liked this one immensely.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

7 posted 2001-09-01 03:01 PM

I loved the way she "hatched a plan to show her love" and how it wasn't what she thought it would...it wasn't "beautiful." That was awesome. The whole poem was awesome. I feel so bad for the girl.Throught the poem though, she didn't seem upset or angry about having the baby. She was looking at baby clothes and choosing names...so for her to not be able to keep the baby in the end really bummed me out. THat must be horrible for a mother. Anyway, awesome write her. You told the story VERY well. And to think, If only her mother showed her love for her in the beginning...

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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