Teen Poetry #5 |
Leaving me |
allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Flashing lights, and unsatisfying words. Worked loud music, Jagged-edged-romance. Slipery colours, Fragments of a scene. Busy violet floor, Dances without feet. Textured fabrics, ripping in my heart. Distorted sounds... Your feet against my floor You're leaving me again... |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
awwwww sad poem. it was good tho. robin |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This IS quite sad. Kinda trippy tho...lol Other than minor spelling errors, this was really well done. Great visuals! Jenn "Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oh gee, this was pretty sad. I hope things do get better for you. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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SunShine913
since 2001-08-19
Posts 211Italy but from NC |
I agree with dopey_dope!!! but good read! *You only live once, so live it to the fullest and have fun! |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Awesome write here, Allie. The imagery was incredible. Hope all is well. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Oh how sad. Allie if you ever need to talk to me, you know you can always email me. Take care and thanks for sharing. ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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