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Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
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North of Hell

0 posted 2001-08-27 04:21 PM


Conforming to the lies they taught
Surrendering personal choice and thought
Playing along, supporting the crowd
Screaming for help, just not out loud

Memorizing their beliefs, not sure of your own
He's always with you, so why are you alone?
You'd turn back if it weren't so far,
if you thought nobody would see the scars

Pretending to love the life you hate
Deciding it's just a little too late
You can reject your faith if you don't get caught
How long ago was your soul bought?

They're abusing the power to educate
Using authority to manipulate
Confusing our minds until believing's too hard
It's almost amusing how easily we're scarred


"Make your life like toiletpaper - long and useful."
"When 2+2 is 5 or less, it's time to question common sense."

[This message has been edited by Kandi (edited 08-27-2001).]

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Acies
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1 posted 2001-08-28 11:00 AM


Kandi,

You should be honest with yourself not only in terms of what you know, but also in terms of what you do afterwards.  It's never too late to turn around and actually follow what you believe in.  Why do you feel like you have to conform with what these people say or do.  Stop lying to yourself cause this will only make you more and more miserable.  Hope things do get better for you.  Thanks for sharing your poem.  Keep it up

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~sugarpie313~
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2 posted 2001-08-28 07:09 PM


this was so good!!!  i loved it... especially the last 2 stanzas... amazing LOL
and i would never ask you to not write another poem... that'd be wrong! hahaha

good job

Valerie

"i'm supergirl, and i'm here to save the world, but i wanna know, who's gonna save me" - WNBA Commercial

Kicking Kim
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since 2001-04-16
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Cloud Cucko Land!
3 posted 2001-08-29 11:49 AM


"They're abusing the power to educate,
using authority to manipulate"
I loved these two lines they made a lot of sense on lots of different levels because you could have been talking about anything - to me I read into it as though it was about the government as they are primarily in charge of education and to some extent they do have the power to manipulate.  But don't be offended if the poem is not about this as there are many other things I read into it as well! A great read!!

^*~Kicking Kim~*^  

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
4 posted 2001-08-29 08:43 PM


Hey guys

I just wanted to say thank you not only for replying but also for putting so much thought into what I wrote and sharing your opinions...Acire, it's been awhile! And I just want to say that was very good advice you gave me. The thing is I'm not conforming my beliefs to make anyone happy, this poem isn't really about ME (I know what I believe in and I stick by those beliefs) It's about just people in general...A lot of people I see don't really believe in the things they say or do, they just think they do because it was TAUGHT to them and they accepted it without thinking about it. I think that's a real shame when people never really figure out exactly what they truly believe in because they're just following what someone else believes. I've taken religion classes and been to church and I never felt good about myself until I realized I have the right to disagree with what I've been taught, that I can put my own spin on my own faith. It's a very empowering and liberating feeling. I'm secure with what I believe...I just wish everyone could have that kind of freedom.

Okay, now that I've written a whole book about it (lol) I'll shut up.
Again, thank you  

~Kay~

We need guidance, we've been misled
Young and hostile but not stupid - Blink

*It may sound absurd but don't be naive
Even heroes have the right t

Spice
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since 2001-04-13
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Resting in my cardboard box.
5 posted 2001-09-01 02:54 PM


Ok, I read this a couple dayd ago but I had no time to reply at all. Grr. HeHe, So Ya, I'm back! HeHe. And wow!!!   I LOVED this! I thought the whole meaning of it was incredibly awesome and you made it even better by putting it to words so wonderfully! I agree with you completely throughout the whole poem. I'm adding this to my library, the concept is incredible.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

Spice
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Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.
6 posted 2001-09-01 02:55 PM


Perhaps this time I'll remeber to click the library box...

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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