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chasing rain
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0 posted 08-26-2001 12:20 AM       View Profile for chasing rain   Email chasing rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for chasing rain

Sometimes when you're standing at a street corner
No one knows what you're writing inside.
They pass you by without a second glance...
As you stand there wondering what they're like
Or if you'll see them again.
Their backs are the last versions of them
That you will ever see.
Their shadows-
Their last goodbye to you.
A time so short,
Too short for partings...

Such a lonely world...

Child, I see the city stones have hurt you.

=====
Just something short...my last poem until I get my muse back...

-Leah


Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

[This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 08-26-2001).]

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Spice
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1 posted 08-26-2001 12:58 AM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

I don't think the muse is gone, I think you are blind.   HeHe... I, as always, was incredibly pleased with this piece. Wonderful write as always...I liked the line about what's being written inside. Off I go! Thanks for the read.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

LoneWolf
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2 posted 08-26-2001 01:21 AM       View Profile for LoneWolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoneWolf

Oh i absolutly loved this. it was great. awesome job here

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Dopey Dope
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3 posted 09-03-2001 02:21 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

I absolutely loved this!!! OMG! This has got to be one my favs, if not my most fav poem you've written. So much depth, and truth within this short piece. Completely outstanding!!!! You've knocked the breath out of me leah...wowness.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Allan Riverwood
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4 posted 09-03-2001 02:51 AM       View Profile for Allan Riverwood   Email Allan Riverwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Allan Riverwood

*raises a hand*  I for one missed this poem.  Sucks to have been me, doesn't it?
No longer.  I'll give you a thumbs up on this one.  Great last line, it was so separate from the rest and it seemed almost cynical.  Other than that, a very deep and thoughtful poem, hence why Javier loved it so much.
~Allan

People call me a madman, but I'm not mad at anyone.
~ Cat Rapes Dog, "Aquarius"

Jezziekaka
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5 posted 09-05-2001 07:54 PM       View Profile for Jezziekaka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jezziekaka

chasing rain~ I liked this alot!   I think it is cool you are a nurse! I want to be a Dentist someday. Great poem!

Jezzika

be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise!

anonymous albert ?
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6 posted 09-05-2001 08:02 PM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

amazing...i truly LOVED this poem...so much behind this...it shows life VERY well...esp the way you discribed such views...

"Sometimes when you're standing at a street corner
No one knows what you're writing inside.
They pass you by without a second glance...
As you stand there wondering what they're like
Or if you'll see them again.
Their backs are the last versions of them
That you will ever see.
Their shadows-
Their last goodbye to you.
A time so short,
Too short for partings...

Such a lonely world...

Child, I see the city stones have hurt you."

well, i WAS gonna quote some of the verses. But, enjoyed every single verse!! HeHe..

if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry-

chasing rain
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7 posted 09-05-2001 08:58 PM       View Profile for chasing rain   Email chasing rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chasing rain

Spice- I know I'm blind.   I have been ever since...ever since......*blink blink*....*also has amnesia*....well, thanks for the reply......did you reply?  

LoneWolf- Glad you liked...loved it.   Thanks for the encouragement!

Dopey- I believe this is the longest reply I've ever gotten from you...WOW! ^_^ hehe. Much appreciated Dopes!  

Allan- It doesn't suck to be you. Your ego gets in the way...lol. ~_^  
Cynical last line? *cue for evil laughter* muaha. Always good to hear from you Allan.  




Jezziekaka- Glad you also liked it! I'm not a nurse, by the way...


Alby-   You'd be a good plageriser.   hehe. Good to hear from you again!

Thanks to everyone!

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

Local Parasite
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8 posted 11-07-2001 11:49 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

Hey Chasing Rain    Leah.  Can I call you leah?


I was browsing your poetry and this title attracted me.  Do you always write this good when you have writer's block?  Because this is pretty damn good lol.

I agree that it's sad how strangers fail to recognize that their fellow man is an individual and, even in passing, we do not have any time (not that we wouldn't take the time, we just don't really have it) to stop and greet all that we see.  Every stranger you ever see is an entire life.

Even if that wasn't what you were getting at, it still had an impact.  I don't understand the last line though can you please explain it?

Thanks Leah  

Theo

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9 posted 11-08-2001 12:30 AM       View Profile for DawnG   Email DawnG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DawnG

This is incredible. You surely do not have writers block in my humble opinion. LOL

                               Dawn
AngelPoet87
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10 posted 11-08-2001 04:15 PM       View Profile for AngelPoet87   Email AngelPoet87   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AngelPoet87

*falls over laughing* writers block.. how cute! This one was great as always, loving the last line.
~Ali

Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel... A tes souhaits... A tes amours... Qu ils restent. Jatdore.

chasing rain
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11 posted 11-08-2001 09:48 PM       View Profile for chasing rain   Email chasing rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chasing rain

I can't believe you people still have this one going around...lol. It's kinda nice. ^_^

For Mr.Parasite: You know the ritual of stoning people to death? Well, when one is first exposed to city life, it's like we are injured because this is not what we are used to. Like we're being stoned (no, not drugged...). It's kind of...a different thought. ^_^; Heh.

Much thanks to all for your encouragement! I think we're finally getting the feel of the pip family again...

++ Leah ++

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

vixengrl04
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12 posted 11-09-2001 07:23 PM       View Profile for vixengrl04   Email vixengrl04   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vixengrl04

Wow!! I think I understood this one, it kinda clicked 4 me.  Very, very, very good!!!!  Wonderful work!!  

~*Nikki*~

~*I'd rather you hate me for what I am than love me for what I'm not.*~

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13 posted 09-04-2002 12:34 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Chasing rain,
The beginning was the music of the street;
the ending, poetry of the music of the street.

Mike
anonymousfemale
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14 posted 09-23-2002 08:57 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

How very sorrowful, m'dear. Must have missed this one once upon a time. It's written with a slight leaning towards more despair than anything else which I really admire. The last two lines really brought it all into perspective for me. Kind of like a slap in the face yet not as harsh.

I do like this, Leah. Mind you, I always did adore your writing.

~AF~

"No wonder I do not make people comfortable. I am a mirror. I have far too many things to say." - Mouthing the Words

 
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