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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2001-08-25 04:25 PM


It seems I've been lying and I didn';t mean to.
I've been doing what I thought was right,
and I got a little bit confused.

You see, when she told you it was over,
and you thought she was speaking for me,
I didn't mean what I thought, I was wrong.

I've been wrong about a lot of things,
and I hate it when I'm wrong about you,
but you gotta know, I'm no mind reader.

I was wrong when I though I heard you say,
that it would last forever and then some,
I guess my hearing wasn't quite right, I was wrong.

I was wrong when I thought it would last,
when I thought you would be true to me,
but that's all in the past now, there's no mystery.

It seems that you've been lying too,
and I don't know what about, nor do I want to,
I just can't figure you out, and I'm confused.

You see, when you said you didn't care,
well I know that was a lie, you didn't mean it,
and you know I'll take you back, I was wrong.

I've been wrong about so many things,
that I've started to loose count again,
there's no mystery in me, I'm no mind reader.

I was wrong when I thought you'd hold me,
and never ever let me go, you lied to me,
I just can't figure out what I'm doing, I was wrong.

I was wrong when I thought I heard you say,
that I was the one you loved, you lied to me,
I just can't let you go now, I was wrong.

Or was I.

Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself.  That's what I live by.

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1 posted 2001-08-25 06:10 PM


that was deep....good write keep it up

Only darkness falls on those without souls

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2 posted 2001-08-25 07:12 PM


It seems like there is never a clear answer when it comes to matters of the heart....i wish there were cuz i think there would be a lot less heart break that way...Nice write...i enjoyed it...keep it up  
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3 posted 2001-08-25 10:13 PM


i love this poem    i wanna marry it      lol

nice job tho

Valerie

"i'm supergirl, and i'm here to save the world, but i wanna know, who's gonna save me" - WNBA Commercial

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4 posted 2001-08-25 10:26 PM


LMAO@Sugar pie...Marry it..HAHAHA

Okay..lol..Anyway.
Whew- Goodness this boy has you filled iwth thoughts and feelings. I think you could make a book out of poems written for/about him. He's really inspired some really great poetry to come spewing out of your lil pen. I love em all. This one, of cours,e is no exception. Love the lil ending too. Thanks for the read.  

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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5 posted 2001-08-31 01:30 PM


The poem poem is about being wrong and then the ending completely breaks it all off. That annoyed me haha, no not really. I liked it. Well done.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Allysa
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6 posted 2001-08-31 04:48 PM


Look at my signature!
Allysa
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7 posted 2001-08-31 04:49 PM


Okay, here it is.

Sugarpie313 married my poem!  (that's my poem, not your poem! pooh!)

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8 posted 2001-09-03 08:50 PM


Wow! That was really deep..I know exactly how you feel. Just remember not everything lasts forever. This was a good poem I hope to see more of your work soon!
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9 posted 2001-09-04 09:16 AM


I don't feel that it was incredibly deep like some of the others... I mean it was good nonetheless, but I didn't really see, "deep". I did like this lots tho, and relatonships and love are so confusing, it's annoying sometimes, you know? Arggg... anywho, keep writing!!

Jenn

"Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill

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10 posted 2001-09-13 06:42 PM


Allysa

Don't put no blame on yourself for what lies others have led you to believe.
It's not your fault, but theirs.  
Remember that and never forget it.
Thanks for the read
*hugs*

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma

[This message has been edited by acire (edited 09-13-2001).]

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11 posted 2001-09-14 02:57 AM


The ending threw it all off a little. Change is good but it didn't suit the piece. If you were going to say that, it would have been better if you gradually got to the point during the piece.
ANYWAY, it sounds like you're having a tough time. Keep smiling and try to be strong. If he treats you like this, you don't need it.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

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