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allie
Member

since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

0 posted 2001-08-24 05:02 AM

you promised me you'd never leave,
you'd always ring,
you'd forever care!
But winters melting into spring,
without you.

With fresh picked flowers in my hair,
You never called,
I don't think you care?
And springs burning into summer,
without you.

*~!~*

So where are you now?
while summer heats its sunblest beaches,
And melts whatever snowmen stand.
With the promises you made?
Gone i guess.

*~!~*

Among millions of fallen leaves,
I lie alone,
I get over you.
And autumn dries into winter,
again.

Icy parks and frosty mornings,
I meet new people,
I forget you,
I'm not scared anymore to stand alone,
again.

*~!~*

So winters back? been a year?
It's not the snow thats cold this year,
It's memories... i'd rather be alone this year?
If thats ok with you?

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

1 posted 2001-08-24 11:13 AM

I liked this. I have a friend, who I feel should be left unnamed, who wet through what this poem was about. I wish I could relate myself, but I have never been in that position. I am glad you are getting over whoever it was. He/she wasen't worth it.

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-08-24 07:45 PM

Nice write here, Allie.
I particularly liked the line baout you laying on millions of leaves.
I loved how you went through each season...Very nicely done. I enjoyed it bunches!

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

3 posted 2001-08-25 02:08 PM

this reminded me of a song that Destiny's Child (atleast the title did) where they go "so where are you now? Now that I need you, tears on my pilliow, wherever you are."
Something like that. Great expression!

Poet Unknown
Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 140
Missouri

4 posted 2001-08-25 02:18 PM

that was a good write i enjoyed readin it

Only darkness falls on those without souls

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

5 posted 2001-08-26 12:51 PM

I liked this alot great job here

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

malangjan
New Member

since 2001-08-26

Posts 1

6 posted 2001-08-26 09:18 AM

Helen:  If you break the mirror, will what
        is reflected in it cease to exist?
Hector: That is the whole question.
            Giraudoux: Tigers at the Gates

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-08-26 11:49 AM

This was beautifully written here hun

I liked it a lot good job

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2001-08-26 08:27 PM

I thought this was ok. Not yer best, but still a good read. Hope to see more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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