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HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

0 posted 2001-08-23 09:28 PM

This one was an odd write. I was just listening to Dave Matthews Band's "Fool to think", and it came to me. Well, enjoy!!!
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As I lay upon this lonely bed,
memories of us run through my head.
Thinking of those times that I thought were so right,
when I thought I saw love in your eyes as they fell into sight.

Was I so wrong?

As I wander these timeless memories,
still trapped in an endless reverie,
I see the way you looked at me,
was I imagining things that were not to be?

Was I so wrong?

I look to my chest with longing and dread,
wishing that there might rest your head.
Will my wish forever go unanswered so,
to slash at my heart and destroy my hope?

Am I so wrong?

I wish for a future of happy things,
one with no you or me in its workings.
A future of timeless love without fuss,
where all there is there is us.

Am I so wrong?

As I lay upon this lonely bed,
memories of us run through my head.
Hope for the future I try to regain,
If I can love once, I can love again.

That, I know, is not wrong at all.

Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually).

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

1 posted 2001-08-23 09:36 PM

                                                              I wish for a future of happy things,
                                                              one with no you or me in its workings.
                                                              A future of timeless love without fuss,
                                                                 where all there is there is us.

i enjoyed this one a lot thanks Rich! i loves the repetition and the last stanza was perfect..you ended this very nicely too. i love your optimisim within this sad situation *hugs*...thanks for sharing!

Piece you life together and you WILL find holes.

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

2 posted 2001-08-24 11:19 AM

Well, I try to stay optimistic it tough situations. It dosen't always work though. I wish I could give some big "I'm okay" speach, but I can't. I'm glad you liked the poem! I will try and post more when they come to me.
Rich.

SunShine913

Member

since 2001-08-19

Posts 211
Italy but from NC

3 posted 2001-08-26 10:05 PM

AWSOME

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

4 posted 2001-08-26 10:46 PM

Such a sad, yet heartfelt poem. We seem to always ask ourselves if we did the right thing or not. Like you said, some things we imagine aren't meant to be. At least we learn from them, ne?
The repetetion of "Am I so wrong?" really stuck in my head. It made me realize that maybe I'm not asking myself that enough...thanks for the reminder.
No matter what they say, love always leaves a mark somewhere in your heart. Or a pain in the brain. ^_^ Hehe...oooooo-keeeeee...

"If I can love once, I can love again."
I agree. Nothing should hinder the love of one to another.
You write such deep, emotional pieces that seems to be quite true to what you are feeling. Thank you for a touching piece.

°L.§.W°

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-09-01 03:09 AM

I really liked the poem. Very powerfully done. Hope to be reading more soon.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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