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Demonic Illusion
Member

since 2002-02-07

Posts 50

0 posted 2002-04-04 01:26 PM

Down in the hallow,
No more tomorrow.
Creeping silently through the fog,
Laying still like a bump on a log.
Plunge through your body quick as lightning,
Watch you fall still no confirmed sighting.
In The Mouth Of Madness I've lead,
Untouchable Darkness I've spread.
Prepare for war get ready,
Cut you up with a michete.
Dark hound of Hell,
Listen to them yell.
Down in the hallow,
No more tomorrow.
In The Mouth Of Madness...
Untouchable Darkness...
No more Tomorrow.

Demonic Illusions, Frostic Dragons, Bloody Tears From Me To You....all surround by a force of Untouchable Darkness

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

1 posted 2002-04-04 01:37 PM

I'm never good at this this comment thing, and I really don't think I sound sincere enough but it was darkly enchanting, these poems tend to catch my soul more often now..I enjoyed it..thanks for the write..

Kristen

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

2 posted 2002-04-04 06:23 PM

Yes, I agree it sounds a bit dark.
A tad depressing really.

Nicely penned.

Jenn

"I can't get you out of my head- your love is all I think about."

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

3 posted 2002-04-05 09:40 PM

oooooh...dark is never a bad thing!
i liked reading this..it was very melodic and i liked the repetition in it all. not your best but not your worst either..

My england is goodly- are you strudable?

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

4 posted 2002-04-06 01:33 AM

"In The Mouth Of Madness I've lead,
Untouchable Darkness I've spread."
I loved that. Great write.

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (04-06-2002 01:34 AM).]

ericaisamonkey
Member

since 2002-04-04

Posts 51
A little town north of nowhere

5 posted 2002-04-06 08:20 PM

that was a tid bit scary, and the rhyming didnt really fit. but it was a good poem. nice write

*Erica*

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