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Smlie4u87
Junior Member

since 2001-04-28

Posts 16

0 posted 2001-08-22 02:40 PM

Hey everyone. Sorry I havn't posted in a long. I've been a little busy, U know well my best friend moving and then me moving, and school is starting towmom. And I hope u all know that Towmom is my Bithday I'll be turning 14. Well anyways, I worte a poem called my life. And I was hopping u guys can tell what you think of it. It would really help. Thankz!!
Always,
Tracy

My Life
I've been hurt so much though out my life.
People have came and gone.
I've shared so much tears
that can full a river.
I always wanted to be happy,
but I was mostly sad.
Some people have laied to me
and hurt me.
Some people stand up for me.
I've had more then my share of bad times.
Sometimes I lay and wonder
what if I was this or that,
what if I had this,
what would my life be like if
that had happen to me.
Most of my life I've been sad and crying.
But realy have I been happy.
Sure I had some good times.
But that was mostly with my best friend.
But she moved away.
I had friends, some bad,
but mostly good.
A lot of them always tried to help me.
But some didn't, oh well.
What I've learned about my life
is that this is who I am.
I may not be skinning, or
wear the same cloths as everyone else.
But like everyone I have dream’s and fears, like
My best friend moving away, with the fear
that she will have all new friends and forget about me.
Well anyways, people have said that I'm a good listener
I'm sweet and very giving.
But some people don't look in the inside of
you or anyone else. Well a lot more people should
because they don't know what their missing out on.

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

1 posted 2001-08-22 03:23 PM

Your poem is really sad but it has a good message I loved it.Keep up the awsome work I can't wait to read more of your poems.
Lauren

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

2 posted 2001-08-22 03:42 PM

Yeah, this is a very nice message. I hope you cheer up!
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

3 posted 2001-08-22 07:36 PM

that can full a river."
FILL a river.
Need ot fix that.
Other thna that, and a couple spelling errors I really liked it. Well expressed. Hope to see more, and hope things look up for you.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

4 posted 2001-08-23 03:08 PM

Nice job. I am curious as to why you said "towmom". I'm kinda confused by that. The poem was great though.

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

5 posted 2001-08-23 09:33 PM

Happy Brithday!

what i thought of the poem?...i thought that its a great reflection upon your life and your soul as you see it so far. it's a pretty sad reflection i must say.

..but i like the fact that you implored the reader or whoever this is directed to to look underneath the surface to the real you. i liked that a lot! thanks for sharing and i wish you a happy year number fourteen!..take things easy..life good for you right now..

Piece you life together and you WILL find holes.

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

6 posted 2001-08-23 10:24 PM

Hey, did u know that if u take mime and my best friends life and mix them together, u get this poem? So naturaly this poem is one I happen to like ALOT. I can relate to most of what u said. oh yeah, I am a little dense tonite, HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!.
Rich

Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually).

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