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HopelessRomanticGuy
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0 posted 08-21-2001 08:10 PM       View Profile for HopelessRomanticGuy   Email HopelessRomanticGuy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for HopelessRomanticGuy


The secret is out,
The question asked.
You said no,
whatís wrong with that?

I gave you my heart,
you pushed it away.
You tore it apart,
you nearly killed me that day.

The pain now almost to much to bare;
the caged beast yearns for release.
I look into your heart hoping to find me there,
but you swept me out with ease.

ďLets be friends,Ē you said,
not knowing without you I am dead.

I would give you everything for you,
and all I want in return is for you to love me.
I want to share love more than friends do,
it was my heart I let you see.

My pain is nearly unbearable now,
itís killing me inside.
To let you go I donít know how,
for now it is time I bide.

Through all the pain I have survived,
never was it ever this bad.
It was you who kept me alive,
now all I am is sad.

Though I hurt like I donít have anything,
I would still give you everything, My Angel.

Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually).

© Copyright 2001 Richard H. Dikeman - All Rights Reserved
cherish
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since 03-25-2001
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swimming in fairy floss.......


1 posted 08-21-2001 08:14 PM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherish

aww this is so sad *hugs*..i liked the poem..it flowed really well in my little head. i think poem wise you did really well in this...the content made me really sad though. give it a bit of time and continue to remain friends i think that if you really love her and you have told her how you feel then its best to stay friends and wait till she cones around..its a sad situation but i hope you make through it soon!

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'Thanks for not mentioning the outside world.'

HopelessRomanticGuy
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2 posted 08-21-2001 08:18 PM       View Profile for HopelessRomanticGuy   Email HopelessRomanticGuy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HopelessRomanticGuy

Thanx cherish. *sighs* I am trying to remain friends, but it hurts like hell.  I don't know how I'd react if she got a boyfriend, I don't know if I can handle that.  It takes all I have not to breakdown around her.  All that stops me is the knowledge that if she knew my pain, she would  hurt, and I don't want that.  It'll get better eventualy.

Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually).

[This message has been edited by HopelessRomanticGuy (edited 08-21-2001).]

Spice
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since 04-13-2001
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Resting in my cardboard box.


3 posted 08-21-2001 09:36 PM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

ďLets be friends,Ē you said,
not knowing without you I am dead."

Richard, you did a wonderful job on this piece. Such a sad predicament you are in. You described your sorrow so well. The flow was extremely well done- the rhyming was nice as well. Thanks for the read...and as always, hope to see more.  

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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4 posted 08-21-2001 10:31 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

"Though I hurt like I donít have anything,
I would still give you everything, My Angel."
That is so sweet... Those last lines really made the poem.  Rich, I am so sorry that you are in this situation.  I know I hate that "Let's just be friends" line.  It always comes after "we need to talk..."  Aargh..   The situation sucks.  Give her some space and time.. hopefully she'll come around.     Good luck.
Awesome write.  You put a lot of emotion in this, and I can see that you're really hurting.  *hug*  Hope all is well..

--Marie

If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car.

AngelPoet87
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Indy


5 posted 08-21-2001 11:14 PM       View Profile for AngelPoet87   Email AngelPoet87   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AngelPoet87

*reaches for the tissue box* This was extremely sweet. Bittersweet, more like it I suppose. The situation in part reminds me of a saying.. "Just because someone doesn't love you in the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you for all their worth." I hope it all turns out for the best, hang in there, take care always, and keep writing. Great work.

~Ali~

Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel.

allie
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since 07-09-2001
Posts 223
Australia


6 posted 08-22-2001 03:35 AM       View Profile for allie   Email allie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for allie

Ohhh!! this is the pitts i hate this situation!! watching the person you Love with every little piece of you look at you in a different light, so before i comment im REALLY SORRY...

Now you're piece, Very nice work here, i love the way you explained what happened and then summed it up at the end... speaking of the end that rocked!!

GREAT POST,
Sorry again

ALLIE
TopGunLauren
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since 08-02-2000
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7 posted 08-22-2001 04:11 AM       View Profile for TopGunLauren   Email TopGunLauren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TopGunLauren's Home Page   View IP for TopGunLauren

Your poem is really sad and I hope things get better for you soon. i loved your poem though and you expressed your feelings really good.Keep up the awsome work!
Lauren
Jezziekaka
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since 08-21-2001
Posts 68
where the trees touch the sky


8 posted 08-23-2001 09:26 PM       View Profile for Jezziekaka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jezziekaka

HRG~ I love this poem!! Very good

Jezzika

be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise!

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9 posted 08-31-2001 01:34 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

I know all about this. It's such a horrible experience to go through, this unrequited love. Hope all gets well. Keep posting.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

WinterWren
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Posts 1044
...Coming to


10 posted 12-04-2002 07:09 PM       View Profile for WinterWren   Email WinterWren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WinterWren's Home Page   View IP for WinterWren

*bows* My back is starting to hurt from all this bowing, couldn't you ever write one I don't like?

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

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