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Kicking Kim
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0 posted 2001-08-20 06:50 PM


You can see me,
in the daunting mists
which are lit by the moonlight.
I stand in this lunar lit spot
and everything I am you can see,
purely and clearly.

Can you see me in the darkness,
as I hide in the shadows
which make perfect disguises.
Am I someome else
when the font changes
can you read through the lines?
can you see through the lies?
can you see me?

It is me
lingering through the rays of light
darting through my soul
and lighting my life.
Nothing can hide me
not even my mask.

Can you see me,
in this hidden destination
which you call the back of your mind.
Do I not hide in the corner
as someone else?
Can you read through the lines
can you see through the lies?
can you see me?

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

© Copyright 2001 Kimberley Mason - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-08-20 09:36 PM


oh Kim, this rocks!!   very well done my dear  
cherish
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2 posted 2001-08-20 09:50 PM


                         It is me
                         lingering through the rays of light
                         darting through my soul
                         and lighting my life.

i liked this one LOTS!..you did very well in this poem kim...i enjoyed the read greatly! thanks for sharing!

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Spice
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3 posted 2001-08-21 05:54 PM


HMmm...Very interesting write. I really liked this. You wrote it so well! I liked the part about reading throught he lines...or osmehting like that. hehe.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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4 posted 2001-08-21 05:56 PM


"Am I someome else
when the font changes
can you read through the lines?
can you see through the lies?"
Wonderful work, Kim!  Your latest pieces have been VERY impressive.  You're growing as a poet with each post.. it's awesome to see that!  This is a very well written piece.  The idea is awesome, and the imagery is well done.  Good work, Kim!  VERY good work!

--Marie

If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car.

sorrowfulangel
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5 posted 2001-08-22 01:10 AM


"am i someone else when the font changes".....i sometimes tend to think strange things like that...i relate to this poem,it describes many things i ask myself often....it's awsome..

"god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways"

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