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Frozen Moments, Pastel Memories

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HopelessRomanticGuy
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0 posted 08-17-2001 09:06 PM       View Profile for HopelessRomanticGuy   Email HopelessRomanticGuy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for HopelessRomanticGuy


I rest my arms upon this ‘sill,
and remember those moments in which time was still.
Those moments which seemed to never end,
play over and over inside of my head.

I awaken from my reverie,
to seek whatever else may be.
I see memories of laughter long since faded,
and seek the innocence that has abated.

But all I feel is loves loss and pain;
my heart has now been all but slain.
It is this pain I try to ease,
with Frozen Moments and Pastel Memories.

[This message has been edited by HopelessRomanticGuy (edited 08-19-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Richard H. Dikeman - All Rights Reserved
HopelessRomanticGuy
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1 posted 08-17-2001 09:10 PM       View Profile for HopelessRomanticGuy   Email HopelessRomanticGuy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HopelessRomanticGuy

Yea, I know I wrote this, but I made a mistake.  The first line is supposed to be the title, not part of the poem.  I forgot the space.
Poet Unknown
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2 posted 08-17-2001 09:52 PM       View Profile for Poet Unknown   Email Poet Unknown   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet Unknown

ya said it all brah, it was a great read nice work man
AngelPoet87
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3 posted 08-17-2001 09:56 PM       View Profile for AngelPoet87   Email AngelPoet87   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for AngelPoet87

Next time all you gotta do is Edit it (referring to the forgotten line break). Good post, keep writing!

Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel.

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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4 posted 08-17-2001 10:38 PM       View Profile for DarkAngelOfTheStars   Email DarkAngelOfTheStars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DarkAngelOfTheStars

hey welcome to passions!  great first post. Post more and dont forget to reply!

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GirlsBestFriend
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5 posted 08-17-2001 11:52 PM       View Profile for GirlsBestFriend   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit GirlsBestFriend's Home Page   View IP for GirlsBestFriend

hmmm...first of all: Welcome To Passions!!! as DarkAngelOfTheStars said  

Nice poem here...especially as you first post. A little short (and sure nothing's wrong with short poems) but we can read the idea clearly. I hope you a good luck and lets read more of yours here!


~lotsa luv

"Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world"

fozzyozzy
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6 posted 08-18-2001 12:42 AM       View Profile for fozzyozzy   Email fozzyozzy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit fozzyozzy's Home Page   View IP for fozzyozzy

You like totally blew me away with this.  It inspired me to get a dictionary and look up some of those words.ha ha. oh it's funny because I really am that dumb^_^.
All kidding aside i am impressed by this first post and look forward for more. and welcome to PIP

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

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7 posted 08-18-2001 04:57 AM       View Profile for punkrockerrobin   Email punkrockerrobin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit punkrockerrobin's Home Page   View IP for punkrockerrobin

welcome to passions welcome to passions welcome to passions welcome to passions welcome to passions welcome to passions
ok i thik that's enough ok you guessed it 'm crazy!well that's a good quality in me! lol anywayz i really iked your poem it was awesome! and about the title thing it puts the title up top in the blue so ya really don't need to put the title but hey whatever floats your boat lol!and again welcome to passions.
robin

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chasing rain
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8 posted 08-18-2001 03:02 PM       View Profile for chasing rain   Email chasing rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chasing rain

First of all, beautiful title. Really held the poem in place.
The flow was good, words nicely placed. The emotion you put forth here really suited it. You ended it well by placing the title at the end of the poem, so that it had a sense of closure.
For a first post, this was very well done, and I welcome you to pip.  
I hope to read more from you soon, and by the way, you can edit the poem by separating the title from the actual body of it...use the pencil icony thing.
Till later.

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

[This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 08-18-2001).]

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9 posted 08-18-2001 03:17 PM       View Profile for Heavens Tears   Email Heavens Tears   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Heavens Tears

I also really liked this title.  It really captures a readers attention, and the poem definetly keeps it.  Wonderful job here.  I hope you like it here at Passions, because I cant wait to see more poetry!

*If you can't stand for something, you'll fall for anything.*

Spice
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10 posted 08-18-2001 07:11 PM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

First off:
   WELCOME TO PIP!  
Second off:
I liked your critique message...lol. Very blunt.
And last but not least:
The poem was very much enjoyed. A wonderful first post. Sad, and soft. And by "soft" I mean- The poem itself had alot of feeling and meaning to it...but when read ( Or atleast when *I* read it.) it came across in a soft/easy going tone. I liked it. Hope to see more posts and ever more REPLYING soon. Thanks for the read.  

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

HopelessRomanticGuy
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11 posted 08-19-2001 06:22 PM       View Profile for HopelessRomanticGuy   Email HopelessRomanticGuy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HopelessRomanticGuy

You liked it! *sniff* You really liked it!.....sry.  I tend to be a little sarcastic from time to time.  I really AM happy that U liked it; it was my favorite of all the ones I've written too (the grand total of poems written: 3).  Thx for all the responses!  I'll try to post often!

                     -Rich

Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually).

Spice
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12 posted 08-19-2001 10:35 PM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

LMAO...Hura! A sarcastic arse.  I think we shall get along JUST fine.  

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

TopGunLauren
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13 posted 08-20-2001 03:21 AM       View Profile for TopGunLauren   Email TopGunLauren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TopGunLauren's Home Page   View IP for TopGunLauren

I live in the past and I spend a lot of time thinking back on memories of frozen moments.I loe your poem and I can't wait to read more keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren
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14 posted 08-21-2001 05:34 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

First and foremost, Welcome to Passions in Poetry!     Secondly, the poem was beautiful.
"I awaken from my reverie,
to seek whatever else may be.
I see memories of laughter long since faded,
and seek the innocence that has abated."
I really liked that stanza.  Very well done. Rich.  I'm going to really like you!  Your rhyme scheme was well done, and the flow, although broken in places, is overall okay   Nice work!  I can't wait to read more posts and replies from you  

--Marie

If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car.

WinterWren
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15 posted 12-04-2002 07:05 PM       View Profile for WinterWren   Email WinterWren   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WinterWren's Home Page   View IP for WinterWren

Wow. *Bows*

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

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