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TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02
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0 posted 2001-08-17 03:33 AM


Why.....
Do I have to say goodbye.
Why.....
Can't I think about the summer and not begin to cry.

Why.....
Does the summer have to end.
Why.....
Wont the scares on my heart mend.

Why.....
Am I scared of going back to school.
Why.....
Do I constantly break all the rules.

Why.....
Couldn't I have lived my life a better way.
Why.....
Am I not sure I want to live another day.

Why.....
Will my life never the same.
Why.....
Do I ask "why" when I only have myself to blame!

   Lauren

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AngelPoet87
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since 2001-04-21
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1 posted 2001-08-17 12:42 PM


This is really good. I like the end especially, but the question of Why is one that never seems to fade with time.

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HopelessRomanticGuy
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2 posted 2001-08-17 10:03 PM


I know how that feels.  W always ask why, and usualy get no answers to the questions that matter most.

Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually).

samt
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3 posted 2001-08-17 11:03 PM


wow, that's really good. Exactly how I feel, and prob. many others, wow, that's, well, what's a word better than really good.

FANTISTIC POEM

Sam

DarkAngelOfTheStars
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4 posted 2001-08-18 06:36 PM


wow, this is really strong. I liked it a lot cant wait to see more  

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5 posted 2001-08-21 10:16 AM


This is probably one of my favs from you, Lauren.  Why... I hate that one word question.  It sounds like you're going through very trying times.  I hope all turns out well.
Nice write.. I really liked the last few lines.  Well done!

--Marie

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6 posted 2001-08-22 11:36 PM


Oyyy girl..u hit home with this one..i swear i asked myself at least half of these questions if not all over the last week...especially the school one and breaking the rules...so true...i hope you get the answers to all of your "whys"...
MoeRocko
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since 2001-04-25
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7 posted 2001-08-23 03:50 AM


Ah yeah, you know I gotta bump this one to the top again :P  Nice post

If everyone demanded peace instead of another television set, then there'd be peace - John Lennon

allie
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since 2001-07-09
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Australia
8 posted 2001-08-23 06:40 AM


This was really good, I must admit I'm a bit of a "why?" and "what if?" fan... so i can realte to this!
G'work!

ALLIE

keoni
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9 posted 2001-08-23 10:47 AM


Yes, this was great! The ending was awesome! I have this problem alot in my life so I totally connected with it.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Jezziekaka
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where the trees touch the sky
10 posted 2001-08-23 09:02 PM


Lauren~ Wow! I liked this poem alot


Jezzika

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