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Teen Poetry #5

Alone Together

Jenabou
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

0 posted 2001-08-16 08:08 PM

Remembering the life we shared
and how we loved
and how we cared
together

Recalling all the happy nights
and how we laughed
and how we cried
together

Looking back on the way we tried
and how we faught
and how we lied
together

Thinking about the way it ended
and how is hurt
and hasn't mended
Missing your love so much
and how you hugged
and your gentle touch
alone

DarkAngelOfTheStars
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

1 posted 2001-08-16 08:17 PM

wow very good poem!

You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights

AngelPoet87
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

2 posted 2001-08-17 12:44 PM

"Don't cry because its over, smile because it happened" Good poem

Liefhe alle ten spijte van duivel.

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

3 posted 2001-08-17 02:37 PM

thanx for that poem...it's good to know someone else feels the same way and i'm not alone, however, i am sorry that you are going through this...good poem

me

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-08-17 07:17 PM

Hura Jen! I REALLY REALLY liked this. The format you used was really nicely done. And how the end it changed...Very great poem!

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-08-20 10:52 PM

The structure of this poem is something that deserves recognition... I LOVED it! Very creative.. the format you used was awesome. It flowed very nicely. The last stanza especially:
"Thinking about the way it ended
and how is hurt
and hasn't mended
Missing your love so much
and how you hugged
and your gentle touch
alone"
That hit me hard. Very familiar feelings over here in this ball park of my life.. Awesome write, Jen. Nice work!

--Marie

If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car.

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