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silvrduck
Member

since 2000-11-05

Posts 146

0 posted 2001-08-16 02:53 AM

find the truth within such anguish
and to you I shall belong
it’s not the reason but the meaning
in how we carry on

now tonight will leave us hungry
leave us to find ourselves
save the clover that i’ve chosen
and to you will I vow... my soul

embrace the questions we’ve seen
and hinder the obsolete
a little dirt makes us pretty
a little sand grinds us complete

..fragile..
please, hold tight now
don’t close me out now

chose to rush me in a whisper
chose to cherish all my wrongs
and baby I will love you
to you I do belong

*love is blind; friendship closes its eyes.*

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

1 posted 2001-08-16 12:04 PM

I like this one. It's very sweet. Interesting style too, very nice poem.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Poet Unknown
Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 140
Missouri

2 posted 2001-08-16 12:08 PM

very nice poem, enjoyed reading it keep writtin, ya got a unique style

Only darkness falls on those without souls

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

3 posted 2001-08-16 07:19 PM

that was awesome. nothing more to say.

Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by.

DarkAngelOfTheStars
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

4 posted 2001-08-16 07:21 PM

very sweet

You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

5 posted 2001-08-17 06:41 PM

"embrace the questions we’ve seen
and hinder the obsolete
a little dirt makes us pretty
a little sand grinds us complete"
Very unique style here...Something baout it just caught my eye- I loved this. Hope to see more very soon.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-08-20 10:38 PM

"a little dirt makes us pretty
a little sand grinds us complete'

Those were definitely my fav. lines. A lot of truth is spoken here. As Jess said, a very creative and unique writing style you used here. A positive message as well. I enjoyed this one. I haven't seen much of you around here lately, so keep posting your work.. I look forward to reading more!

Well done.

--Marie

If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car.

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2001-09-09 01:28 AM

silvrduck-
  I'm liking this one a bunch!
  The thoughts are wonderful, and it flows very nicely.
  Awesome job on this!

  *smiles*
  ~vicky

"...a heartbeat in every syllable..."
-vlraynes
<a href="http://www.home.earthlink.net/~vraynes/">

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2001-09-09 03:34 PM

Well done here. I really liked the poem and the way it was written. Keep writing

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

9 posted 2001-09-12 01:36 AM

i liked this one a lot!very well done! good work.
robin

Things I Have Learned I've learned that you cannot make someone love you. All you can do is stalk them and hope they panic and give in

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