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Raven Skye
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0 posted 2001-08-15 03:06 PM


This poem is for my friend Mark. Sorry I haven't been posting lately. I've been hanging out with the boyfriend a lot. (remember the boy from the blind date WOOHOO)  


You claim to be my best friend,
that you'd never let me down.
You can tell me anything,
but you never come around.

Too busy with your girlfriend,
or working all the time.
If you don't want to be around me
Let me know and I'll be fine.

You're going away to college,
I'll probably never speak with you again
Even now if I spoke with you
I wouldn't know where to begin.

We've grown so far apart
you don't seem like family anymore,
but if you double cross me,
you better be very sure.

I won't put up with anyone like that
I'm picky with who I choose.
See friends, to me, are people
that you will never lose.

So if you leave me now
and never speak with me again.
Be sure of what you want.
Cuz forever you'll be my ex-best friend.


*×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×*
Don't just trust yourself,
learn what parts of yourself to trust.

[This message has been edited by Raven Skye (edited 08-15-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Raven Skye - All Rights Reserved
LoneWolf
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since 2001-03-10
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1 posted 2001-08-15 03:12 PM


i liked this alot, you expressed your feelings well. good job here

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

keoni
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2 posted 2001-08-15 04:39 PM


I liked this one. It's very good. I have a few people who I need to give this poem to. I liked the last line alot.
Jon

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Spice
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since 2001-04-13
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3 posted 2001-08-16 11:08 PM


HURA! I'm glad things between you and the guy from the blind date are going so well!


The poem was oddly familiar. LOL..It's like you have been following me around and worte about the thoughtsin my head and the things goingon around me. hehehe...I can relate 100% to this. Very well done.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

anonymousfemale
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4 posted 2001-08-17 11:42 AM


YAY! It is so great to hear things between you and mister mystery blind date are going so well. Now no getting too funky missy.  

This doesn't sound a good situation at all. I'd hate to double cross you. You sound really nasty. We should do lunch sometime.  
Some strong emotions backed up with equally strong wording. I like this. It demonstrates power.
Thanks for the read.  

~AF~

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5 posted 2001-08-17 11:52 AM


Congrats on the chemistry between you and Mr Blind Date.  I really enjoyed this poem, because I have been in similar situations, but I guess everyone has.  This was a very nice piece.  Maybe you should show it to this person to let him know how you are feeling.  I hope everything works out.

I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Ski*Chick
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6 posted 2001-08-17 02:19 PM


Hey i like your poem, it's sad but it shows your fellings. forget him and find new and better ones.


Forget the times that he walked by, Forget the times he made you cry, Forget the times he spoke your name, Remember now you're not the same, Forget

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7 posted 2001-08-20 10:32 PM


WOOHOO!!     Congrats between you and the Blind Date Guy!  (Does the Blind Date Guy have a name?   )

Anyways, I liked this poem.  You put a lot of emotion into it.  I liked the rhyme scheme and the flow.. very nice work.  I enjoyed this!  As always.. and come back!  Don't spend too much time away..   Don't want EVERYONE to leave on us, now do we?  Heh.  Nicely done.

--Marie

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8 posted 2001-08-28 05:58 PM


You did good, but the blind date thing and reply of others threw me off.  I don't see good things happening in the poem at all.  care to share your explanation, cause others might be seeing something I just can't seem to figure out.  Thanks

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9 posted 2001-08-28 06:55 PM


i love this! i feel the same way about my ex boyfriend i wish i could talk to him again cuz we were good friends and he just left for college and i know he'll hardly ever want to talk to me unless all his other "buddies" wetn to a party without him hahaha well great job!! i like it a lot

Valerie

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HopelessRomanticGuy
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10 posted 2001-08-28 09:54 PM


I LOVE this poem! Too bad not all people understand how important a friendship is.  i am lucky that my best friend does.  You will find better friends, if he leaves and dosen't talk to you, then he wasn't really your best friend after all.  There will be better.

Love will come and love will go, but friends are forever (usually).

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11 posted 2001-08-29 12:43 PM


omg i know what you are going threw i loved it!!!

:exorcist:!~Andrea~!:exorcist:

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fullest*
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12 posted 2001-09-04 01:22 PM


Congrats on the boyfriend, and hope things get better for you and your best friend.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
13 posted 2001-09-05 12:37 PM


We've grown so far apart

*sighs* i know only too well how this feels....yeah and the part where you dont know what to say to them the next time they call or meet up with you...or you just dont have anything to say...i hope things take a turn for the better soon Skye!


wooooooooooooooooooOOOoooooooooo hooooooooooooooo!! and two for you and the blind date guy!!! glad to hear that things worked out so well for the two of you!

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