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the_rescue
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

0 posted 2001-08-15 07:30 AM

Another day, Another night
moments drag when your not in sight
the shadows become my closest friend
wishing my time without you would end

Silence is all I hear
knowing that your not here
haven't heard your voice in a while
something about missing your smile

I call and call, no answer on your phone
so I sit here waiting. Alone.
Did you get the message I left earlier today
or di you pass over it, let it slip away.

Silene is all I hear
knowing that your not here
haven't heard your voice in a while
something about missing your smile

Time right now is my biggest enemy
it keeps me from getting close to thee
are you with "him" once again
where is the chance for our relationshp to begin

Silence is what I fear
just wshing that things were clear
nothing but silence for a while
will I ever see your smile?

we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

1 posted 2001-08-15 10:31 AM

this was great...your first line reminded me of a song i know..keep writing.

Regina

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-08-15 11:55 AM

very heartfelt, I liked this very much

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

3 posted 2001-08-15 01:41 PM

i lked this a lot, great job, i could relate

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

DarkAngelOfTheStars
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 255

4 posted 2001-08-15 06:37 PM

great job, i really liked this it was sweet and i can relate

You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

5 posted 2001-08-16 11:16 PM

Wow! Awesome job! I really liked the repetition of the stanza. I thought it was well done. I could really relate to this. Thanks for the read.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

6 posted 2001-08-16 11:27 PM

i wish you could see my smile.
what makes me smile is thinking of you.
the talks we shared.
the memories i will keep.
for i never knew such love could come from me.
yet i know you do not wish to hear.
so i will be quiet cus i know the end is near.
you have left but i am still here.
for i know you love her and not i.

jimmy i wish you would write me an email sometime.
robin

i don't give up without a fight so boys beware!

[This message has been edited by poeticgirl01 (edited 08-16-2001).]

the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

7 posted 2001-08-17 05:53 PM

I don't love anyone at all

we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

8 posted 2001-08-20 12:40 PM

"Silence is what I fear
just wshing that things were clear
nothing but silence for a while
will I ever see your smile?"
I loved that twist on the end, there. Nicely done! I really enjoyed this... was this written from personal experience? Aargh.. that's a very frustrating thing to deal with.
I really like this one, I think you did a fine job with it. Nice work!

--Marie

If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car.

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

9 posted 2001-08-20 01:21 AM

uh yeah whatever

i don't give up without a fight so boys beware!

TopGunLauren
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since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

10 posted 2001-08-20 02:42 AM

Great poem I really like it so keep up the awsome work!
Lauren

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

11 posted 2001-08-29 01:45 PM

Well done here. I enjoyed the poem greatly. Hope to see more from you....

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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