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Holding Hands |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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You waited until we broke up to hold my hand. To put your hand in my back pocket. To give me a hug before you left each day. To call me without something to talk about. You waited until we broke up to love me truly. To hug me closer without touching me. To hold my memory in your heart. To let my problems be your own. I want to walk down the street with you. To let you know what I have to say. To let you see what your blind to. To show you what you refuse to see. Part `1 Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
That was very sad, but also very good. I hope all will truly be well. Regina |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Grr- Don't you just hate guys like that? The situation sucks- I know. Great write, allysa.  You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Awesome write... I LOVED these lines: "To hug me closer without touching me. To hold my memory in your heart. To let my problems be your own." Especiall the "hug me closer without touching me." Awesome work. I really enjoyed this... and *sigh* the situation indeed does suck. Guys can be so confusing. Hang in there, kiddo Thanks for sharing this one.. well done! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Wood_Stock Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 58The little yellow |
Hey, ladies, ladies... give us guys a chance here!! Geeze... heh heh.. Nahh!! You had lot's a of great lines tucked in here, some powerful words. oh, and not all guys are like that (gotta put in a good word!), I'm having a simmilar problem with my girlfriend... so "ner" ...just to go back to the great primary school insult... Though, we're (hopefully) not gonna break up..! Anyways, I enjoyed the read. Wood_Stock. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Allysa, just tell him how you feel. That's all I have to say  *hugs* hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
Lol @ woodstock.....erm...yeah!  *hugs* allysa...im looking forward to the second part of this one already...very well done here! Piece you life together and you WILL find holes. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
You better hurry up and post the 2nd part!!! I was reading it then all of a sudden i see "part 1" and im like "nooooo" LOL This was really good i cant wait to read more so hurry up |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Dang men!!! Grrr, why do they have to do that? I say you smack him around for a while This was well done tho, good job on expressing your feelings.Jenn "Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Men are good! C'mon gals! Anyway, hope things do get better for you little sprout.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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