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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2001-08-14 07:38 PM


I'll walk through life,
with my eyes squeezed shut,
blindly hoping,
to fall into your arms.
I'll be blind for love,
if love is blind,
if me and you can be,
if you'll be blind too.
I'll live each day,
with my eyes squeezed shut,
hoping to bump into you,
somewhere in my darkness.
And only if I live,
with my eyes squeezed shut,
will I ever find you,
because love is blind.


Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself.  That's what I live by.

© Copyright 2001 Allysa - All Rights Reserved
Ina
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1 posted 2001-08-14 08:46 PM


open up your eyes and look at whats in front of you. dont stumble or try not to...
good poem

Regina

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2 posted 2001-08-15 06:42 PM


Nice write...I liked this bunches!
"I'll be blind for love,
if love is blind"

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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3 posted 2001-08-18 11:25 PM


Impressive, Allysa.
"I'll be blind for love,
if love is blind,
if me and you can be,
if you'll be blind too."
Love is very blind... I really liked this.  I can connect with what you're saying, because those thoughts sound so familiar.  Very similar to my own.  Wonderful work.  I enjoyed this!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

TopGunLauren
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4 posted 2001-08-19 04:25 PM


Great poem I loved it keep up the great work!
  Lauren

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5 posted 2001-08-27 05:16 PM


You might even bump into Javi  
We don't want that now, do we?  
Seriously, Allysa, don't lose hope
Sometimes you need to do what you have to do ya know
Hope you understand that last line
keep sharing

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma

cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
6 posted 2001-08-27 11:02 PM


very good write allysa!....dont listen to acire..the toona doesnt know what hes talking about!...loved the poem...realy cute!

Piece you life together and you WILL find holes.

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
7 posted 2001-08-28 12:56 PM


This was a very cute poem and original idea!! I really liked this hun!! Keep it up  
allie
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8 posted 2001-08-28 07:44 AM


o0o0o0o0oo0o0ow!!

Gees, this hits home, I picked up that by stumbling in darkness your somehow posponing your life for him, which is what i tried to do...
Very very very very nice piece... Sweet as pie too!

ALLIE

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9 posted 2001-08-28 03:53 PM


I really liked that one.  Maybe if you just wait and let it come to you, that true love will eventually find you...  Great piece, I liked it a lot!

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?  

Kicking Kim
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10 posted 2001-08-28 06:20 PM


"Hoping to bump into you,
somewhere in my darkness"  

These two lines made me relate to the poem so much, I really enjoyed this poem because I understand the level of what you are saying completely and I'm sure your love will bump into you sometime soon!!  *hugs*

^*~Kicking Kim~*^

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

Delirious_Smurf
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11 posted 2001-08-28 06:46 PM


Great poem!

I liked loads...sortta sad in a way cuz love has a certain sadness to it at times but good nonetheless.

Who you are and who you will be is right in the palm of your hand.

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12 posted 2001-09-03 02:31 AM


I thought you wrote this fine, but I don't agree with the main concept of the poem, but oh well. It was well written. Good job.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Jezziekaka
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13 posted 2001-09-05 07:44 PM


Allysa~ I loved this poem!   I hope you bump into that person!

Jezzika

be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise!

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