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Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

0 posted 2001-08-13 11:37 PM

The world I see started closing in,
Frightening  lightening  flashbacks of places I’ve been.
I fight, wiggle and scream to free their grasps,
“Judgement Day” in a boney voice that rasps.
I see a face before me   empty, lifeless, dead!
Suddenly and flaming eyes burning red.
He’s come to judge, decide my fate to be,
In dreams, no nightmares, he has haunted me.
His stone cold grip’s upon me, like snakes around my neck,
Here to steal souls   and my life to wreck.
I scream a shattered scream   of a soul that’s lost,
In my life it seems to be  the lines that I have crossed.
It’s those lines condemning me  for eternal time,
I should have thought before   I lived a life of crime.
I thought I could be strong  and hold myself together,
But so did those before   and they too burn forever.
I had the chance to change   blindly I turned my head,
The cost is so much worse   worse than being dead.
I wish I would have listened   to all that I was told
I wish I would have changed   before I grew so old.
I lay upon my deathbed   cursed by my old ways
For my judgement I now wait   for the End of Days
fyi/btw-
  I would like to say that i wrote this poem almost a year before the movie came out.  The movie had no influence on this piece..as a matter of fact it was inspired by a reoccuring nightmare of mine...so with that said...i hope you enjoyed it.

" How can i feel if i can't breathe...?"
- Godsmack

Barelybreathing
Junior Member

since 2000-04-26

Posts 46

1 posted 2001-08-14 01:07 AM

I've had nightmares like that too...creepy...I liked this,it had a great flow and the words just sunk right into my head.

'The greatest thing in the world is to know how to be one's own.'
~Montaigne~

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

2 posted 2001-08-14 02:31 PM

That was a good poem. I have had that same nightmare, I just pray that for me it doesn't become reality.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-09-04 02:15 AM

It's good to know it was written before the movie. That does mean I will not take creativity points away

Well done on the poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

4 posted 2001-09-04 02:37 AM

I wish I would have listened   to all that I was told
                               I wish I would have changed   before I grew so old.
                               I lay upon my deathbed   cursed by my old ways

liked this one lottsa! before or after, i dont really like that terminator dude...

i thought you did really well with this one kaos. thanks for sharing!

............Daffodils
........Daffodils .....
....Daffodils..........
Daffodils .............

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

5 posted 2001-09-04 05:22 PM

Oooo! I Really really loved htis piece. Very awesome. Nightmares aye? I never have nightmares about this, I lot of my friends do though...Hmmm...Anyway- Loved the read!

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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