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punkrockerrobin
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0 posted 2001-08-11 11:46 PM


i am here,
waiting for you.
i am here,
listening.

i cry because,
you hurt me.
i hear what you say.

nothing you do can change my mind.
you hurt me.
did you know i am here.
listening,
waiting,
and watching you.

watching to see if you will love me.
i am here!

-robin

i don't give up without a fight so boys beware!

© Copyright 2001 Robin Hill - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-08-12 12:06 PM


I really connected with this.  the situation seems very familiar to me.  It's a tough situation, but keep your head up, and don't lose sight of who you are in this struggle.  Love is very blind, and oftentimes it's easy to do that over another.     Nice work on this poem.  I liked the repitition.
Well done!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

TopGunLauren
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2 posted 2001-08-12 09:53 PM


This poem is really sad but I totally connect with what you are saying.Keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

Kaos
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between space and time
3 posted 2001-08-13 03:30 AM


aww...ppl in this forum are gonna give me an emotional overload.  I've gone almost 3 years without crying and this is the 2nd piece in one night that nearly brought me to tears...

it was a good piece...i didn't read it..i felt it..very moving...great poem

" How can i feel if i can't breathe...?"
- Godsmack

slickpnkgal
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4 posted 2001-08-13 09:10 AM


awwwwww i'm sorry didn't mean to make ya cry.
robin


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5 posted 2001-08-13 01:20 PM


I thought this was an awesome poem.  You seem to know exactly what I'm feeling right now and the expression was great!  I like your signature quote because that's the way I am too.

Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself.  That's what I live by.

keoni
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6 posted 2001-08-13 04:27 PM


I liked this one. I can totally relate. I know that sounds bad cause I'm a guy but hey... oh well! It is a very sad poem. I loved the ending!
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

the_rescue
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7 posted 2001-08-13 09:31 PM


wow robin that was really good you've come a long ways since I first started reading your poetry but hey I think all of us here have in one sense or another. anyways I'll talk to you later...Peace....DOGWOOD REPRESENT

we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us

Poet Unknown
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8 posted 2001-08-14 11:38 AM


very nice poem, really moved by it, keep writtin your work is much enjoyable
DarkAngelOfTheStars
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9 posted 2001-08-14 11:43 AM


great poem  

You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights

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10 posted 2001-08-24 11:17 PM


I liked this one a lot. Well done here!  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

branden726
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11 posted 2001-08-24 11:18 PM


Wow Nice poem keep it up  

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

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