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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL 
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“Senses” Guiding ours bodies Through this world Our senses Affect our lives Giving them meaning For who could live without them? Though with time things change These senses bring a deeper meaning Other then mere survival When love begins to grow Our senses of touch Taste Sight Sound And smell Are all pushed to the limits When one is in love Touch Feelings Barely known Gentle as the wind Yet reaching us deep within Caressing your love With an open heart Soft as the sea A gentle touch To shatter the walls Around your heart Brining all things to light Taste Sweet As honey Upon your lips The nectars of life Meant to keep us alive Tasting the purity Of your beloved’s lips Knowing without a doubt That throughout time You will never forget The memory of their kiss Sight Seeing Light unveiled As darkness leaves Love shinning through all Bringing happiness when you see her Cherubic features Cast upon this mortal land Fallen from the heavens You see your love You heart, you soul Standing before you With more beauty then A thousand stars Sound Voice Like chimes Upon the wind Graceful sounds you hear Sending shivers down your spine Echoes of eternity Ricocheting off your soul Hearing a voice so serene That it can bring your racing heart Down to peaceful beat. Smell Fragrant As flowers Beautiful and free Dwelling upon the hills Their aroma upon the breeze They guide us through The world before us Attending to our lives But when Love strikes Deep within our hearts Delving to the most inner Reaches of our souls Each sense is enhanced Beyond our understanding All we can know Are the feelings that they bring And the love that we have It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
"You will never forget The memory of their kiss" I'll say...*sigh* Awesome write here! I'm in awe. It was so beautiful, so descriptive. Just incredible writing here! I don't even know what to say I'm so impressed. LOL  I really liked how you addressed EACH sense- very creative idea here. And you balanced the poem well by making 2 stanza to describe and elaborate mor eon the sense. Very good!I want More! More I say!You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. [This message has been edited by Spice (edited 08-10-2001).] |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
I love this it's amazing. well done on this it's so georgus. keep it up katie "by takeing no risks you are really risking everything" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I'm sure Katiepoo meant it's "gorgeous." It is rather splendid. Nice poem, Lone Wolf. Yours, ~Allan The children of the nobility are playing here. they look up at you with disgust as you come near. |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
I already read this  i get the wondeful privilege of reading them before you post  hehe i read it again and i still love it! its so cute and sweet. You are an awesome writer and i love reading your poems keep it up!You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Thank you all for your relpies It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was awesome! "These senses bring a deeper meaning Other then mere survival When love begins to grow Our senses of touch" Very true words here... love pushes one to every limit there is. Very nicely written.. the format is something that really appealed to me.. how every other stanza is pyramid-like. Those stanzas flowed excellently. Wonderful work, here. I really enjoyed this one. Keep sharing all your work! --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
LoneWolf- This is excellent! Some beautiful imagery you've created here. Wonderfully expressed! *smiles* ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
such a well written piece...reminded ME greatly of the element piece by you...these all were awesome works...VERY creative as well...buh bye  if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry- |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Ooo this one I LOVE! The way you went through all the senses and the reality of love to a person was simple amazing. This is one of those better pieces that you print off. It's going through the printer. It's also going to the library. You might want to check for spelling errors though. Read it through and you'll find them. Great job. ~AF~ "Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?" |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was such an awesome topic to write about!! Very original!!! I liked it a lot...good job!! |
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