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Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

0 posted 2001-08-09 07:31 PM

He sees the smile
upon my face
and the glossy moisture in my eyes.
The frangrance of my soul
and the rosy bloom in my cheeks,
upon my satin white complexion.
He feels the gentle touch
from my fingertips
and admires the length of my curling lashes,
which he says look beautiful
when graced with snow.
He sees the long locks,
descending from my head,
which lie gracefully upon my back.
I stand and wonder
whatever he sees in me,
theres no point in trying to live a lie.
For a while now I've known
that the resplendent figure he sees in me
is YOU.

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-08-09 07:42 PM

"resplendent" what a cool word
I had to look it up! LOL

I liked this very much....

Kicking Kim
Member

since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

2 posted 2001-08-09 08:00 PM

Ah thanks!! I was trying to capture the beauty and loveliness, it took me a while to find it in the back of my mind too!

Kicking Kim

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-08-09 10:13 PM

well, I think you did a very good job

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-08-09 11:37 PM

Wow! Wonderful description here! The imagery was so well done. Nicw write.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-08-10 12:23 PM

AWESOME imagery! I loved the pictures your words brought to my mind... very beautiful, very beautiful indeed. Wow, this is one of my favs from you, Kim... definitely. Fantastic work.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

allie
Member

since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

6 posted 2001-08-10 03:35 AM

Definately a wonderful post,
loved the ending!
Actaully liked the whole thing a lot... *im going to say what everyones already said* great imagery!!

ALLIE

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

7 posted 2001-08-10 08:31 AM

Great imagery... and terrifical ending. It really was unexpected to read. Good work here.

Jenn

"Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

8 posted 2001-08-10 02:21 PM

This was great i loved it.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

9 posted 2001-09-03 01:59 AM

Very well done here. I liked the ending a lot. Keep posting

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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