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chasing rain
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0 posted 08-08-2001 08:17 PM       View Profile for chasing rain   Email chasing rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for chasing rain

Northern Lights

Pickled stars hang on silver threads in the sky
Swaying lightly to the tune
Of forgotten dreams.
Sorrow fills the air as mist does to tears
And lines the bare sky line
With hues of purple, blue, and a touch of black
While larks sing to the moon.
The whistling of the wind playes with the trees
And the forest dances to the tune of the night.
Streaks of light leap across the sky
And embrace the sky above.
Swirling colours of green and pink
Embellish the world with rays of light
Stroking the stars...
Or so that's what it seems.
The moon enjoys this little show
And laughs along.
Slowly the light fades
And the forest is left
To the waking of the sun
So full of golds and reds.
And as the day begins
The light embraces the sky above
And holds the world
Within its hands...

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This was actually originally called "Pickles", why? I have no clue. I think it was the stars at the beginning...anywho, did anyone notice that I write about night a lot? Yeesh...

-Leah



Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

[This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 08-08-2001).]

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Delirious_Smurf
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1 posted 08-08-2001 09:44 PM       View Profile for Delirious_Smurf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Delirious_Smurf

Hey  
Niiice...I specially loved this part

"And as the day begins
The light embraces the sky above
And holds the world
Within its hands..."

How beautiful...*thumbs up*

Who you are and who you will be is right in the palm of your hand.

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2 posted 08-08-2001 10:14 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

This is gorgeous... I did notice that you write about night... but writing about night one can write more images.  Wonderful work!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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To be honest, the title would have sucked if THIS poem was called Pickles haha. Anyhow I really liked the poem. I thought it rocked.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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4 posted 08-09-2001 01:58 AM       View Profile for punkrockerrobin   Email punkrockerrobin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit punkrockerrobin's Home Page   View IP for punkrockerrobin

purdy poem! hehe i liked it!
robin

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5 posted 08-09-2001 09:50 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

beautifully done  
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beautiful, as always.. ...and "pickles"...umm...WHY?..

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anonymousfemale
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7 posted 09-07-2001 09:51 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

You write about night a lot do you? I hadn't noticed.  

Who cares though? Night poems are far better than day ones. You can get more from them.
This one had a quality to it that wasn't off the same standard of your other night ones. The descriptions were beautiful, I'll give you that, but I feel you could have gone into them a bit more.

Thanks for the read though. I enjoyed it but not as much as your others.  

~AF~

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"Swirling colours of green and pink
Embellish the world with rays of light
Stroking the stars...
Or so that's what it seems.
The moon enjoys this little show
And laughs along."

WHoa!! I do not know what to say to this poem!! All i can say is AMAZING!! And i love that part above ^...Truely amazing work!!! You are so talented   Im jealous!!!!
Tequilia_Sunrise
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very nice
Kaos
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'Swaying lightly to the tune
Of forgotten dreams.'

i love that grouping... i'm not sure what it is about it but anyway... awesome piece, thanks for sharing

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-i wrote it somewhere in time

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Must bump a Chasing Rain poem...habit.  Not that you will ever know since this is archived.  

They say the sweet is never as sweet without the sour.  So where's my sweet?

 
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