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self inflicted murder (NOT about suicide)
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self inflicted murder (NOT about suicide) |
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the_rescue Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 316Japan |
Murderer you kill your own being caught buy the thing your not seeing it controls you it kills from the insyde no matter where you run you cannot hide It eats it destroys rots and decays leaves you wishing for the good ole daze it destroys all linkage to the human race causes your name to become a disgrace self inflictide homocide no one to turn to or to confide lost in the midst of pain and shame left in the cold without a name dying left crying left asking yourself questions on why you fall why it is that you beat against a brick wall repentance comes hard and the scars grow thick the remorse leaves you, keeled over completly sick puking up your insydes trying to kill the pain in the mean time it drives you insane don't cry don't shead a tear, self pitty stand up get out of your mediocrity don't lie down don't let it win don't be overcome by your self inflicted sin yet I cry my soul aches it cries in pain seperation from you my Lord drives me insane that's my self inflicted death the only thing that will steal my breath sufficate me from the insyde out cause my life to be filled with doubt but I will never go quietly into the night I will not let the sin win without a fight. we fall like the stars then rise like the sun..Repentence.Forgiveness.We are blame worthy hold us to our wrongs..but don't hold our wrongs against us |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. this isn't about suicide? What is it about? Powerful piece. Wonderful read... thanks for sharing. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
library piece. It has its own meanin to it. I think i understand it. amazing work |
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Delirious_Smurf Member
since 2001-08-08
Posts 90Nothingness,P.R. |
Wow so full of emotion..I loved...I didn't think of it as suicide...like I'd think it's metaphorically killing the human race, etc.  !!Who you are and who you will be is right in the palm of your hand. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Why would I confuse this with suicide? Anyhow, I really liked this. The meaning is very different from a suicide poem. This was just great though. I liked it a lot.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
WOW!!!  I'm stunned! wow... This was incredibly powerful writing! SO strong! I love it! Yes, "wow" pretty much covers it all. hehe. You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Wow, this really is a stunner I am used to your excellent work but this is beyond anything I have ever read from you. I think this a powerful, superb, and all together masterful piece. As said about it’s library worthy I really enjoyed this and it sets a new standard for you. Thank you for sharing and I truly hope you continue to write poems just as good or better than this one. -- Jermaine "Blood Moon" Host: Lark.crodo.com Port:1313 "Control is a fantasy that only the weak minded belive they have." [This message has been edited by Linc (edited 08-09-2001).] |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
i agree this is really great You know you 've completely descended into madness when the matter of shampoo has ascended to philosophical heights |
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