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Zombie Man
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0 posted 2001-08-07 11:56 PM


Hit me,
watch me turn red.
Hit me again,
watch me start to bruise.
Hit me even harder,
now watch me bleed.
Watch me take your anger,
While you release it on me.
Hit me once,
Now hit me twice.
Hit me a third time,
and you think it's nice.
I just hurt on the outside,
While inside,
Inside I die.
My life doesn't matter to you,
So keeping stabbing me with that bamboo.
Soon I won't take your abuse anymore,
I will only take my freedom...
From you..

Poetry is not just words on paper that may rhyme, but words that are from your heart expressing yourself for others to see from your eyes.

© Copyright 2001 Michael Cheeseman II - All Rights Reserved
Spice
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1 posted 2001-08-08 12:58 PM


First off, I like the signature.  
As for the poem, very strong. Hope all is okay. I thought you did a very good job on this piece.

You wouldn't worry about what people thought about you if you knew how seldom they did.

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2 posted 2001-08-08 02:01 AM


Wow.. very powerful piece.  Talking about being hit like that felt like I was being hit by a brick.. okay, maybe not a brick   I really hope all is well, and this isn't a personal experience.  You portrayed your emotions very well.  I really enjoyed this.. thanks for sharing it with us!  keep posting all your work.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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3 posted 2001-08-08 02:45 AM


i'm sory but this poem hit so close and i mean close to home that i just couldn't finish it.
robin

i don't give up without a fight so boys beware!

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4 posted 2001-08-08 02:59 PM


Woah.  This was so powerful and emotional.  I am sorry that you have to deal with this abuse.  You should definitely try to get help.  *Hugz*  I hope everything works out.
Kicking Kim
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5 posted 2001-08-08 03:45 PM


This was a very strong and emotional poem, I loved it.  Hope that it isn't personal to you, and if so I sympathise greatly for you as this is an extremely difficult problem.  I hope that you are OK now if it is about you and that you are out of this terrible, terrible life.  The poem left me speechless, it was truly briliant.  Interesting, intriguing and inspiring.
                            

^*~Kicking Kim~*^  


"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

[This message has been edited by Kicking Kim (edited 08-08-2001).]

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6 posted 2001-08-08 05:24 PM


Wow this poem was a very powerful one. It really blew me off my seat. I thought you did an awesome job here, but I hope things do get better for you. Good luck.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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