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Hardkore
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since 2001-01-31
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San DIego, California

0 posted 2001-08-06 01:07 AM


Once I flew close to the sun
But it's heat did not burn me
For I flew brilliantly
And though my wings were mad of wax
My courage and pure heart, ensured they would last
Alas my wings meet your passion, and was no match
And your love and passion melted my wings of wax
Soon I began my descent to the ground
With nothing but love, and sweet thought of you


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The Exile
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since 2001-07-14
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1 posted 2001-08-06 01:16 AM


A brilliant piece of work!! I especially like the symbolism there:

"Alas my wings meet your passion, and was no match
And your love and passion melted my wings of wax"

Keep it up!

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2 posted 2001-08-06 01:35 AM


I really liked this one..

"And though my wings were mad of wax
My courage and pure heart, ensured they would last"

Nicely done!  I loved those two lines.     Wonderful work.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

Spice
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since 2001-04-13
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3 posted 2001-08-06 11:41 AM


"And your love and passion melted my wings of wax
Soon I began my descent to the ground
With nothing but love, and sweet thought of you"
I really enjoyed this piece.
Nice write!

mistic
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since 2001-05-06
Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.
4 posted 2001-08-06 01:21 PM


I really liked this one a lot. It was also very sweet. my favorite lines were:
My courage and pure heart, ensured they would last
Alas my wings meet your passion, and was no match
And your love and passion melted my wings of wax

great job

chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15
Posts 737
Canada
5 posted 2001-08-06 08:53 PM


Beautiful write! You have nice imagery there, and the symbolism was great. Very sweet.   Loved the ending.
Thank you.

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06
Posts 380
Maine, USA
6 posted 2001-08-06 09:29 PM


Wow this is so good!! I love it and I can really relate... I have no wings OR love now so... haha... *prints*  


Suga!

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

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7 posted 2001-08-08 04:07 PM


NIcely done here! I really liked how you wrote this one. Hope to see more.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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