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Hardkore Junior Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 33San DIego, California |
Lost in a haze, Haunted by a face, My memories remind me, of a better place, Only to find myself stranded here thinking, Where did everyone go, as my veins glow, Under the flouresent light of my soul Now that I relize the limit of my sky I find myself wounded by a treacherous lie Just another victim of childhood stardom Caught in the crossfire, waiting to die |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Now this I like. It's so dark and wrote the piece very well. Despite its shortness, you described quite a bit. Thanks for sharing this. I will be looking for more. ~AF~ "Why not light the candle in the dark tunnel while we head for the light at the end?" - Anonymous Albert to anonymousfemale |
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samt Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 52Brisbane |
That was really great, I had tears in my eyes. It reminds me of someone I knew. I lost a close friend. That was very touching. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
"Where did everyone go, as my veins glow, Under the flouresent light of my soul" Damn Garret! I LOVE this. A very deep, dark write. You expressed yourself SO well, and so beautifully. Hope to see more.  |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Just another victim of childhood stardom Caught in the crossfire, waiting to die" very cool poem.....I'm assuming in this case, the word "die" is used metaphorically |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
That last line really gave me chillbumps... that hit the hardest. Very powerful poem... and dark. I enjoyed this one. It's nicely written. I look forward to seeing more from you, hopefully soon. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
OH MY! *SPEECHLESS*! ROBIN i don't give up without a fight so boys beware! |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
liked the whole thing but especially this line: Now that I relize the limit of my sky Very very good piece, ALLIE |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed the poem. I thought you did quite well on it. The word 'die' in my eyes was metaphoric, like SEA took it....so yea hehe nice poem  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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