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Jessica
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0 posted 2001-08-05 04:52 AM



I have to let you go
Please don't ask me why
I think you know
So help me say good-bye

We've shared some times together
But I can't continue
This is for the better
I'm falling in love with you

Don't say a word
I know what you are thinking
The feeling is slurred
My heart is sinking

You have another
And I'm played as a second
I can't stand the cover
It's becoming unpleasent

So I have to let you go
Please don't ask me why
I'm certain you know
So help me say good-bye

2/3/01

© Copyright 2001 Jessica Langford - All Rights Reserved
allie
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1 posted 2001-08-05 06:58 AM


Woa... thats really really deep... im so sorry to read that post... you really need to find out if its you or her thats second here... But make sure you dont get hurt...
Very emotional piece

ALLIE

TopGunLauren
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2 posted 2001-08-05 04:23 PM


Your poem is really deep and very sad but very well written.I totally understand what you are saying in your poem and I hope you can get through it.Keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

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3 posted 2001-08-05 05:58 PM


Jessica... this is beautiful.  You show a lot of maturity in this piece.  Saying you don't want to ruin anything, so despite the fact that you are in love with him, you're letting him go.  VERY admirable.  I really enjoyed this one... Nicely done!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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4 posted 2001-08-05 11:17 PM


i liked how you wrote this...heartfelt and VERY emotinal...great job Jess#2...enjoyed the read.

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5 posted 2001-08-06 12:04 PM


Very good poem. I didnt like the fact that it was so sad.I hope that things work out in the end.
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6 posted 2001-08-06 12:42 PM


You portrayed the feelings behind this one really well babe. It must have been a hard thing letting him go...I went back an re-read this after you told me what it was about. I can really see how it fits to the story.

Just remember what I said..the past is simply that. The past. Whatever's happened in your past, it won't change the way I feel about you.

Love ya,    
-Adam

Of all the things that I confess,
Here's one that is doubtless
I will love you always Jess
Never think I could love you less

Spice
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7 posted 2001-08-06 11:29 AM


Hi Jess #2.  
I liked this. You did the right thing. You shouldn't be second to anyone. Very well done here.  

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8 posted 2001-08-08 03:55 PM


Well done here....I hope all turns out for the best!!  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

sean mani
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9 posted 2001-08-09 02:38 PM


a person with seconds is just dazed and confused...u r heart should only be with one person...if he has another...choose a person that parallels u in the heart...

sean
(just a word of advise...other wise...nicely written)

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