A Tale of Tattered Lace (repost from Dark Passions)

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Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2001-08-04 01:51 AM

A little girl stands by the street,
Tears streaming down her angelic face,
Shivering in the icy December winds,
Her only a warmth a sweater of lace.

Why is she crying?
What does she fear?
Everyone just passes her by,
Why can’t they hear?

A little boy hangs his head in defeat
On the verge of stumbling from this place
He runs down the street, slips around some bends,
Crashes to the ground, they call him a disgrace.

Why is he crying?
What does he fear?
Everyone just passes him by,
Why can’t they hear?

The little girl helps the boy to his feet,
The tears he helps wipe from her face,
Then his jacket he offers to lend
To replace the sweater of tattered lace.

Why aren’t they crying?
Why don’t they fear?
Everyone just passes them by,
So why are they still here?

Her lip trembles as their eyes meet,
She puts her arms around him, falls to his embrace,
Wounds gone unseen beginning to mend.
He lowers his head by hers, his heart a race.

How’d he cease her crying?
How’d she quiet his fear?
Everyone just passes them by,
So they’ll just hold each other near.

Of all the things that I confess,
Here's one that is doubtless
I will love you always Jess
Never think I could love you less

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

1 posted 2001-08-04 03:56 AM

Kosestsu!

Most definetly a library piece! I LOVE it! The last stanza...no...the last LINE... Incredible! The whole thing was awesome! The imagery/desrciption was wonderful. A fine job here!

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

2 posted 2001-08-04 04:01 AM

very nicely done!
robin

i don't give up without a fight so boys beware!

bOoGaSuGa
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since 2001-08-03

Posts 54

3 posted 2001-08-04 04:04 AM

wow ppl are still awake at this hour?!?!? lol
very nice poem good job

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-08-04 01:08 PM

Nicely done here. I surely did enjoy this!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

5 posted 2001-08-04 01:35 PM

I really enjoyed this one. I liked how you started two separate stories and ended with the two coming together. The vision of the sweater being tattered lace was great. Overall, you did exceptionally well! Thanks for a wonderful read.

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

mistic
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since 2001-05-06

Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.

6 posted 2001-08-04 10:19 PM

This is awesome... I loved it.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-08-05 12:54 PM

Wow, Adam. VERY beautiful work. The images were amazing. I've really been enjoying your work lately, but this tops it off. NICELY done, indeed!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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