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Shygirl82
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0 posted 2001-08-03 03:56 AM


***I recently realized that I may have feelings for one of my guy friends...I am not sure where its going..but I am having fun finding out!!  This is not the best..but I had to write something about him***


You held me
When I couldn’t stop crying
You listened
Through all of his lying

You were my friend
Never anything more
Now you got me thinking about you
Like I have never thought of you before

You told me
Seeing my smile just makes your day
My usual thoughts of HIM
Slowly began to fade

They were replaced of thoughts of you
The way you worry about me
The way you can always make me laugh
I began to wonder could these feelings be true?

I begin to detect
The sparkle in your eyes
The warmth of your hand
The way that when you appeared
Butterflies would emerge in my stomach

You gently kissed me
Just on the cheek
Now I am even more confused
Did you do it because you like me?
Or was it just a simple goodnight?

You gazed in my eyes
Gently squeezed my hand
You turned around
Calmly called out
Until next time!

One day at a time
Sounds like a perfect idea
Taking it slowly
Maybe if I do it right
You might end up being mine



Smile!!  You never know who may be falling in love with it...

[This message has been edited by Shygirl82 (edited 08-03-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-08-03 04:08 PM


This was good, But ya know u did kinda stop the rhyme a couple of times u started in one line and ended the next it would have been better if u carried it on, it was a good poem and i liked this one.

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

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2 posted 2001-08-03 04:47 PM


i totally liked the way you expressed yourself in this one...VERY well said...great job,Nikki.

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3 posted 2001-08-03 07:19 PM


I thought this was nicely written. Good luck with the guy.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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4 posted 2001-08-04 05:05 AM


Great poem.  I think you should go for it, but take it slow whatever is going to make you happy.  I hope you get whatever your heart desires.  And (if his friend is single, I get what i desire too j/k!!!) anyway great poem to go with a great girl.
Chez

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*I have this theory that if were told we're bad.  Then that's the only idea we'll ever have.  Maybe

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5 posted 2001-08-05 12:27 PM


Wow... I used to feel this way about a friend of mine.  Unfortunately, things didn't turn out well as of lately.  But good luck with this situation, I hope things work out better for you than they did with me   He sounds like a great guy...

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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6 posted 2001-08-07 12:23 PM


this was well done.
Friends make the best companions. Best of luck with you 2.

allie
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7 posted 2001-08-07 03:20 AM


I agree with the take it slow bit..

And i always love a good love poem... I'm a major sucker for them! lol... especially well written ones and i really liked this one infact it seemed like a fairytale post... and you've made it seem so easy to take it slow... But i've tried that and it makes me look up to you that you can handle it... im also a sucker for rushing into things~! lol... but i wish you luck with this guy... Sounds like he likes you!!

ALLIE

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8 posted 2001-08-07 03:25 AM


Aww this poem was so cute....i have to admit i love the feelings of butterflies in your stomach when you like someone and stuff...its such an amazing and irreplacable feeling...
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