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jaded
Junior Member

since 2001-07-24

Posts 20

0 posted 2001-08-02 08:26 PM

Confession (this poem is dedicated to a girl named Vari)
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There are some things in life that seem too hard to say
but it stays in my head every moment each day
grip onto my hand and I'll take you up high
you resemble an angel - adorning the sky

The greatest of cynics on love at first sight
now the darkness has lifted, I've spotted the light
a maiden so perfect, such pale soft white skin
cant say that I love you - its time to give in

From the first time we met, you emblazened my mind
such powerful feelings I thought love was blind?
The most beautiful girl - too good to be true?
I finally know that I'm in love with you

If it weren't for the gravity, pulling me down
I'd be above everyone, floating around
I'd walk across water then turn it to wine
I'd do just about anything, please say you'll be mine

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

1 posted 2001-08-02 11:16 PM

That was so sweet Jaded... I loved it. I hope to see more of your work...

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

2 posted 2001-08-03 03:00 AM

This was a beautiful piece. I related to it quite well. Very Very sweet!
Thanks for sharing
~Nikki~

Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it...

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-08-03 04:03 AM

The girl is pretty lucky to have somebody cherish her this much. Very sweetly written. I enjoyed it much.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2001-08-03 11:27 AM

Awww! I agree with Dopey. Great job it's so sweet!!

Jenn

"Baby I've been drifting away, dreaming all day, of holding you, touching you, the only thing that I wanna do is be with you..."Faith Hill

jaded
Junior Member

since 2001-07-24

Posts 20

5 posted 2001-08-03 02:31 PM

hey guys

thankyou for your kind words, its great to know that others have found enjoyment out of something i wrote, i hope i can write more that you will enjoy.

thanks, i look forward to other peoples feedback aswell

jaded

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

6 posted 2001-08-04 01:55 AM

This was so sweet. I REALLY REALLY like it. The last 2 stanzas imparticular. Loved em. you expressed yoruself so well through this whole poem, and the last stanza, I know what you mean. How love makes you feel so impowered. One honestly believes they can do anything, conquer the world, turn water to wine. Excellent write.

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-08-04 11:58 PM

The last stanza was DEFINITELY my fave. VERY nice work! Very sweet poem. I'm sure this person cherishes you as much as you cherish her

NIcely done, I really enjoyed this.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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