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Isabel Galaxia
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0 posted 2001-08-02 07:28 PM



I want a place to run, a place to hide
Dark and cold
Like I feel inside.

I think I’d cut myself
If I didn’t mind the scars.
Then my wrists would show
I know your pain.
40 hours a week
A job that doesn’t pay
Soon, soon I will return
To my yearly hell.

Holding back the tears that beg to fall
I will not let them see me cry,
They will not think I’m weak.
Holding back the words I long to say
I will not speak,
They will not yell.
Alas, they do anyway.
I do nothing right.

I think I would purge
If the acid wouldn’t eat away my teeth.
Then my smile would show
I know your pain.
Constant smile and issue uniforms
A cheerful voice that answers the phone
No, no they cannot see
How depressed I am.

I want a place to run, a place to hide
Dark and cold
Like I feel inside.  

- Sorry to post another so soon.  I can't take it anymore...I just can't take it...
Bel

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Jessica
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1 posted 2001-08-02 11:43 PM


Bel ~ I know how you feel hon... *hugs* It will get better. When you are at your lowest there's no other way but up. This poem made me think... I used to be extremely depressed and now that I have gotten better (on medication) I take it forgranted. I certainly hope you find that peace soon... Thank you for sharing this... Great poem, and great expression...  
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2 posted 2001-08-03 06:32 PM


I liked this one.....sounds like yer going through something really bad. I really hope things get better for you.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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3 posted 2001-08-04 07:11 PM


Bel... wow.  I don't know what to say.  I connected with every word of the poem.  The beginning stanza is awesome, and I was very pleased to see that you ended with the same stanza.  Wow.. VERY nicely done.  I just hope all is well.  Beautiful writing... I really enjoyed this.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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