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Terryloveiris_85
Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 61
The middle of nowhere

0 posted 2001-08-02 11:14 AM

He's something I want,
so very bad.
But can't have.

I want his sweet smile,
so very bad.
But can't have.

I want his gentle touch,
so very bad.
But can't have.

And I want all his love,
so very bad.
But can't have.

i'd give eternity to be by your side-goo goo dolls/City of Angels soundtrack

goodness is found in the heart, not the money.

Low Man's Lyric
Member

since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

1 posted 2001-08-02 11:16 AM

Short, to the point and nicely done. thanks for the read.

"Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before."
~Steven Wright

Alyssa

Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 385
IM ENGAGED!!!!!

2 posted 2001-08-02 12:01 PM

When i red this:
"He's something I want,
so very bad.
But can't have."
I instantly thought of Jeremy
and last night. I quoted those exact words! I swear it!
and then I cried. But anywayz I reeeeeally liked this because of my situtation and its a small and meaningful piece
goodjob!

"I have no never-again, I have no always"
Pablo Nerudo

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

3 posted 2001-08-02 02:02 PM

I agree with Low Man. short, Sweet, to the point. Nicely done.
Don't say can't though... Try.

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

4 posted 2001-08-02 07:33 PM

Like everyone said..very short..but extremely sweet. Thanks for sharing!
~Nikki~

Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it...

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

5 posted 2001-08-02 07:36 PM

Why not?
Good poem.
Bel

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

6 posted 2001-08-02 11:29 PM

Like bel said... why not? Very good... you said a lot through your simple words.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-08-03 06:55 PM

Great job on the poem. Sounds like something we can all relate to though. Some people are just untouchable.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

8 posted 2001-08-03 06:58 PM

i relate...well written...in a simple and heartfelt way, i liked it.

"if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take" - when thugs cry-

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

9 posted 2001-08-04 09:36 PM

I can relate to what you're saying. I think many people can. You expressed yourself very well. Nicely done.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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