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mistic
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0 posted 2001-08-02 12:26 PM


Here I drift off to sleep
In this cold bed of lies
That have been spun around me
Much like a spider web,
To trap me in.
No rest will come to my tired aching eyes
That have wasted away
With the fallen tears
And their salty marks.
I can't stand any more empty moments
Of faking what's really there.
I can't stand faking another hollow smile
That's used to hide what I really feel and think.
Ever fading lives
That we surrender to pain, false hopes, and dreams.
Feeling like you're always in a place
Where you just don't belong,
But continuing on like the actor that you are.
Darkness closes in
Bringing on the weakness
That lies in every one of our hearts,
The weakness that fightens us,
Into living up to everyone's expectations
But our own.
'No I would not sleep in this bed of lies'
Where everyone falls for comfort,
So toss me out
On to the ground
Where I may find my own comfort that I need.

© Copyright 2001 Stephanie Harmon - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-08-02 05:25 AM


Reading this a second time was nice to do.     Thanks kindly for the repost.
It's late and I needed something refreshingly dark to make my night complete.  This did it, without a doubt.
What more can I say that I didn't say in my last reply to this, back in Teen #4... not very much.
Something I neglected to mention last time was the mood I drew out of this.
I really need to go to sleep quickly, 'cause this piece is in my head... it's going to haunt my dreams.  
I look forward to that, you know.
Thanks for late night reading, Misty.  
~Allan

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2 posted 2001-08-02 09:02 AM


Hey,

     I also enjoyed it, I must have missed it the first time around. Until your next poem

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3 posted 2001-08-02 11:19 AM


Now that truly is a bed of lies, I really enjoyed the feeling I got from this poem. Thanks for sharing again (since it is a repost  ).

"Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before."
~Steven Wright

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4 posted 2001-08-02 12:32 PM


matchbox 20 has a song called Bed Of Lies
but i like this poem more than i do that song
(and matchbox 20 is my fav group)

"I have no never-again, I have no always"
Pablo Nerudo

mistic
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5 posted 2001-08-02 12:53 PM


Thanks everyone. It's good to be reminded of what people thought of my older poems. And Alyssa... I was inspired by the song so I wrote that poem.   but I'm glad you liked it
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6 posted 2001-08-03 03:59 AM


I thought this was nicely done. I liked this poem better than the Matchbox 20 song too.....but i hate Matchbox 20  
Anyhow, well done here.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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7 posted 2001-08-03 04:02 AM


I thought this was really good.  I too like it better than the Matchbox 20 song...and I do like them. I missed this one the first time around so thanks for re-sharing!!
~Nikki~

Smile!!  You never know who may be falling in love with it...

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8 posted 2001-08-04 05:16 PM


I really liked this... My fave lines were: "I can't stand any more empty moments/Of faking what's really there."
Wow, I can relate to this.  I connected with this whole poem... Nicely done!  I really enjoyed trhe read.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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