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chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

0 posted 2001-08-01 02:45 PM

I look up into the big blue screen
Under the sun and moon
Stars and clouds are but a dream
The wind is but a tune.
Holding back my visions true
I don't want to see
The world before, the world of blue
The world in front of me.
The clouds pass by above my head
The sun is blocked from sight
The birds and songs have gone and fled
I'm left to darkened night.
The rain soon falls down from the sky
Piercing hardened earth
And slowly night begins to die
And day has found its worth.
The light bleeds through the clouds of gray
And reflects upon my hand
So wet with rain through light's array
Which surrounds this wasteful land.
And so I close my eyes in light
To this world of blue
And vanish above uncertain heights
To blend with sky-filled hues.
I look up into the big blue screen
Under the sun and moon
Stars and clouds are but a dream
And wishes do come true.
-Leah

[This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 08-01-2001).]

Low Man's Lyric
Member

since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

1 posted 2001-08-01 03:06 PM

Beautiful, nice flow and wording painted a nice picture for me to see. Into my library this goes.

"Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before."
~Steven Wright

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

2 posted 2001-08-01 05:29 PM

this was very nice. very potent imagery. Keep writing Leah.

Regina

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-08-03 03:52 AM

I thought you did nicely on this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

4 posted 2001-08-03 04:05 AM

I agree..great imagery...very beautifully written. Excellent write!
~Nikki~

Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it...

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-08-03 04:20 PM

you write so beautifully...i liked the sense this piece gave me...a wonderful read...Leah.

"if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take" - when thugs cry-

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-08-04 05:35 PM

Beautiful.. absolutely beautiful poem, yet again. I am very impressed, seeing as just a few weeks ago, your muse was nowhere to be seen. This is an awesome piece. Wonderful job!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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