Teen Poetry #5 |
I Want To Know |
Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
I seen the two of you Together tonight You were holding her hand And playing with her hair I was five people behind you You didn’t know I was even there Which to me is completely fine Its not like you would even care So this is girl The girl who you dumped me for After nine months You just decide to walk out the door So what does she have That I just don’t possess? Was it how I looked Or did I just not provide enough happiness? I want to know How long were you with her Before you left me Was it months? Or just a few weeks? I gave you all of me Heart, body and soul I guess that wasn’t enough You just wanted more So I hope your happy Really I do And someday I will realize That “we” ended Not because of me But because of YOU It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them. |
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thedragonthomas Junior Member
since 2001-07-30
Posts 15 |
well i think that you should think about it his way for a bit. sometimes realtionships get old, though you might have put your heart into it, he didnt and its really his loss so try and be happy, though its hard, you can move on. he will see the error of his ways eventually, and hell come crawling back to you nd you wont be there for him because he ditched you. well talk to you later |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
Well I enjoyed the poem but I am sorry that you had to end up that way, I hope everything works out. "Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before." |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I liked this alot. Heartbreak always fills people with so many mixed emotions. I know how you feel exactly though. Yep- it's horrible to stand there and watch the ex with the new girl. Don't analyze/critique yourself over it though. It won't do any good at all. I liked this alot though. Flowed wonderfully! |
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thug-a-licious Junior Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 27 |
i really like this poem alot. I'm sure all of us have had to watch a loved one with someone new and we all know how it feels. You're poem describes it soo great though. I'm sorry you have to go through this but just remeber "you don't know what you got till it's gone" maybe he'll realize this someday , and you'll have the pleasure of turning him down for somebody better when he does. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was like very to the point and very angry sounding. but it was good. keep it up. Regina |
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Raven Skye Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 112.In a House. |
i understand this one greatly. good job. *×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×* |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Thanks for the replies everyone. Spice, You are right I have so many mixed emotions running through my head I really dont know what to think. One part of me is happy that he is gone..the other just misses him so much..at any rate...thanks for replying!! Thanks so much to everyone else who took the time to reply!! ~Nikki~ Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it... |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
I really liked this piece... Great expression here. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Shygirl, this is sad.....but the ending....that realization is a part of moving on. I hope it happens soon. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
VERY well said...i REALLy liked this piece...but a tough situation...hope things get better...soon, Nikki. "if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take" - when thugs cry- |
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Angelwings Member
since 1999-08-27
Posts 222IL, USA |
Nikki~ Great poem, first of all. I understand what you are feeling. We covered that tonight. And I'm sorry to say even after like 2 years since me and James breaking up I still cringe when I see him and Andi and think they have a child together it just makes me wanna hurl. LoL but having those emotions are good, it shows your human. A human with a wonderful heart and a sensitive soul. I'm sorry you have to feel pain because of him though! Ypu should've let me beat him up lol. Chez *that what does not kill us makes us stronger!* |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Awesome poem... very emotional... and I want to say that whether it was months, or just a few weeks... in my eyes, it doesn't matter. He still cheated on you, and that's so wrong. You deserve much better anyways I really liked this poem. Thanks for sharing it. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
Well kind of sounds to me like she went through your trash can and dug out an old slimey piece of trash (the guy) that perhaps you were finished with. but i hope things get better for you. this was a good poem, you did a great job of expressing your feelings. |
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