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Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19
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Ilinois

0 posted 2001-08-01 02:58 AM


I seen the two of you
Together tonight
You were holding her hand
And playing with her hair

I was five people behind you
You didn’t know I was even there
Which to me is completely fine
Its not like you would even care

So this is girl
The girl who you dumped me for
After nine months
You just decide to walk out the door

So what does she have
That I just don’t possess?
Was it how I looked
Or did I just not provide enough happiness?

I want to know
How long were you with her
Before you left me
Was it months?
Or just a few weeks?

I gave you all of me
Heart, body and soul
I guess that wasn’t enough
You just wanted more

So I hope your happy
Really I do
And someday I will realize
That “we” ended
Not because of me
But because of YOU

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

© Copyright 2001 Nikki - All Rights Reserved
thedragonthomas
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since 2001-07-30
Posts 15

1 posted 2001-08-01 03:42 AM


well i think that you should think about it his way for a bit. sometimes realtionships get old, though you might have put your heart into it, he didnt and its really his loss so try and be happy, though its hard, you can move on. he will see the error of his ways eventually, and hell come crawling back to you nd you wont be there for him because he ditched you. well talk to you later
Low Man's Lyric
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since 2001-04-03
Posts 236
In a dream
2 posted 2001-08-01 03:53 AM


Well I enjoyed the poem but I am sorry that you had to end up that way, I hope everything works out.

"Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before."
~Steven Wright

Spice
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since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.
3 posted 2001-08-01 08:46 AM


I liked this alot.
Heartbreak always fills people with so many mixed emotions. I know how you feel exactly though. Yep- it's horrible to stand there and watch the ex with the new girl. Don't analyze/critique yourself over it though. It won't do any good at all. I liked this alot though. Flowed wonderfully!

thug-a-licious
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since 2000-08-08
Posts 27

4 posted 2001-08-01 02:24 PM


i really like this poem alot. I'm sure all of us have had to watch a loved one with someone new and we all know how it feels. You're poem describes it soo great though. I'm sorry you have to go through this but just remeber "you don't know what you got till it's gone" maybe he'll realize this someday , and you'll have the pleasure of turning him down for somebody better when he does.
Ina
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada
5 posted 2001-08-01 05:32 PM


This was like very to the point and very angry sounding. but it was good. keep it up.

Regina

Raven Skye
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since 2001-03-03
Posts 112
.In a House.
6 posted 2001-08-01 06:54 PM


i understand this one greatly. good job.

*×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×*
Don't just trust yourself,
learn what parts of yourself to trust.

Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19
Posts 245
Ilinois
7 posted 2001-08-02 07:39 PM


Thanks for the replies everyone.  

Spice,
You are right I have so many mixed emotions running through my head I really dont know what to think.  One part of me is happy that he is gone..the other just misses him so much..at any rate...thanks for replying!!

Thanks so much to everyone else who took the time to reply!!
~Nikki~

Smile!!  You never know who may be falling in love with it...

Jessica
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8 posted 2001-08-02 11:27 PM


I really liked this piece... Great expression here.  
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9 posted 2001-08-03 06:59 PM


Shygirl, this is sad.....but the ending....that realization is a part of moving on. I hope it happens soon.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

anonymous albert ?
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10 posted 2001-08-03 07:03 PM


VERY well said...i REALLy liked this piece...but a tough situation...hope things get better...soon, Nikki.

"if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take" - when thugs cry-

Angelwings
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since 1999-08-27
Posts 222
IL, USA
11 posted 2001-08-04 05:12 AM


Nikki~
  Great poem, first of all.  I understand what you are feeling.  We covered that tonight.  And I'm sorry to say even after like 2 years since me and James breaking up I still cringe when I see him and Andi and think they have a child together it just makes me wanna hurl.  LoL but having those emotions are good, it shows your human.  A human with a wonderful heart and a sensitive soul.  I'm sorry you have to feel pain because of him though! Ypu should've let me beat him up lol.
         Chez

*that what does not kill us makes us stronger!*
*I have this theory that if were told we're bad.  Then that's the only idea we'll ever have.  Maybe i

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12 posted 2001-08-05 12:31 PM


Awesome poem... very emotional... and I want to say that whether it was months, or just a few weeks... in my eyes, it doesn't matter.  He still cheated on you, and that's so wrong.  You deserve much better anyways   I really liked this poem.  Thanks for sharing it.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

mistic
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since 2001-05-06
Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.
13 posted 2001-08-05 01:46 AM


Well kind of sounds to me like she went through your trash can and dug out an old slimey piece of trash (the guy) that perhaps you were finished with. but i hope things get better for you. this was a good poem, you did a great job of expressing your feelings.
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