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thedragonthomas
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since 2001-07-30
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0 posted 2001-07-31 10:53 PM



The Angel flies
She calls my name
She caresses my head
With her soft, snow white hands
She lets me know that she cares
I need to be loved
I need to feel loved
I need to feel your touch
I need you by my side
The angel, she flies
Away carrying my heart in her hands
I don't understand why she cares
I don't understand why she loves me
Why my angel?
You need to know that i care
You need to know I'm still here
You need to feel my touch
You need me so much
There is no deciet in your sweet voice
With your shoulder length hair
That is blacked, streaked red
It brushes my face
It lets me know my angel is here
Fly on my little angel
Travel across the sea
Never to return
My angel
But tell me of the things you see
Your hazel eyes
They stare into mine
I feel your breath, coming on
Fast, your lips touch mine
Slowly we hold each other
It's a dream, a state of mind
My angel, she flies
She flies away with my heart
Leaving my body on the floor
Leaving the rest for all of you
But she can never have my soul
My heart is hers

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1 posted 2001-07-31 11:11 PM


Welcome!   this is great  

I liked this part ....

"I need to be loved
I need to feel loved
I need to feel your touch
I need you by my side"


oh and check your email for a special greeting!   ~SEA

Spice
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since 2001-04-13
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2 posted 2001-07-31 11:26 PM


   WELCOME TO PIP!  
I liked this.
The description was done VERY well.
Hope to see you posting/replying more in the near future.  

Low Man's Lyric
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In a dream
3 posted 2001-08-01 12:53 PM


Great poem, I know how you feel. Oh and WELCOME TO PIP!

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~Steven Wright

Jessica
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4 posted 2001-08-01 01:24 AM


     Welcome To PIP!!!      

Shygirl82
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Ilinois
5 posted 2001-08-01 02:54 AM


Welcome!!!  This was a great write....Thanks for sharing and I am looking forward to reading more!
~Nikki~

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

chasing rain
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Posts 737
Canada
6 posted 2001-08-01 02:20 PM


Hola, and welcome to PIP! This was a really good first post, full of great imagery! You had a really solid ending, which was probably my favorite part in the whole piece. The poem had a nice, soft feeling to it, much like how we "visualize" angels. I hope to see more poetry from you! Thank you for a wonderful post.  

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

wayoutwalt
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7 posted 2001-08-01 02:24 PM


o yuh get the lead out and give her your soul o yuh!!!

good poem yuh got me into it

Welcome to Passions  

Ina
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Quebec, Canada
8 posted 2001-08-01 05:40 PM


This was great work. welcome to passions! i hope youll enjoy it here. I hope you share lots more of your poetry with us.
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9 posted 2001-08-03 04:58 PM


Welcome to Passions! Well done here. I fully enjoyed this first post!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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10 posted 2001-08-04 06:33 PM


I REALLY liked this!  Welcome to Passions in Poetry.  Very nice first post, the images are amazing!  I really liked it.  Thanks for posting it, and look forward to seeing more posts and replies in the future   So keep posting all your work.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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