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Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2001-07-31 01:32 PM

Sweat’s pouring from his brow,
The sun beats him down.
The dust chokes his lungs,
And still he trudges on.

He doesn’t have a thing
But the clothes on his back,
The sand sears his feet,
And still he trudges on.

Neglected by his own,
He’s been cast into exile,
Doomed to wander the desert,
So still he trudges on.

Of all the things that I confess,
Here's one that is doubtless
I will love you always Jess
Never think I could love you less

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

1 posted 2001-07-31 01:37 PM

Its easy to feel were walking that desert alone

but were all walking it together
no matter how much it feels like were in exile

Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

2 posted 2001-07-31 03:12 PM

Adam, I really enjoyed this one. *hugs* Love you...

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

Love you, Adam!! :)

angel_2401
Member

since 2001-06-12

Posts 131
Cincinnati, OH

3 posted 2001-07-31 06:06 PM

I like this one. I hope to see more!!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

I'm a nobody, nobody is perfect, therefore I'm perfect.

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-07-31 11:05 PM

I like this.
All this horrible stuff happening to him and yet he never gives up.
Great write!

Low Man's Lyric
Member

since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

5 posted 2001-08-01 12:49 PM

This poem reminds me of one that I wrote ahile back, any who this is a well flowing, well writen poem. Good job, 'till your next.

"Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before."
~Steven Wright

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-08-01 02:22 AM

message was agreat one...i can relate...as i am trudging of this path in life.

if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-08-03 04:08 PM

I liked this one a lot. Well done here. I hope to see some more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

8 posted 2001-08-03 07:00 PM

Strong imagery here, as well as a strong message! Write on!

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

9 posted 2001-08-04 09:39 PM

Just as everyone said.. Nice, powerful message, and wonderful images. I really liked this one. Nicely done, Adam!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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