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n e where
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0 posted 2001-07-31 01:08 AM



Oh wondrous mortal
There's such awe in your voice
When you speak to them
A light enchanted spell
Weaves its way through my ears
Everytime you push out those words
With your silver tongue
You amaze me
As I call out into limitless void
'Where is that woman
Where is that girl?
That being who is stirring up this light?'
I call to you
Can u hear me anymore?
Right here in your shadow
My security blanket
My electric blanket too
Always knew how to keep me warm
Dear my thoughts are getting lonely
My heart a weary little flutter it does
Be still my little one
She will come
She will come.

~I'd rather see the world from another angle~ Jewel.

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anonymousfemale
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1 posted 2001-07-31 10:26 AM


Have hope and anything will happen. Nice expression. Keep your head up and all that.

~AF~

"Reality is just a crutch for people who can't cope with drugs." -- Robin Williams

Spice
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2 posted 2001-07-31 10:53 PM


I liked this. I thought your thoughts were written well. Bets of luck to you. Thanks for the read  
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3 posted 2001-08-01 02:33 AM


i liked the poem...you expressed yourslef nicely...stay strong.

"if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take" - when thugs cry-

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4 posted 2001-08-01 02:34 AM


Great expression in this piece...  
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5 posted 2001-08-03 04:22 PM


I enjoyed the poem. I thought you did well on it.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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6 posted 2001-08-04 05:38 PM


You did a very nice job on this one.  Nicely done!!  I really enjoyed this.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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