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since 2001-03-18
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0 posted 2001-07-30 06:19 PM


I've known you for so long
ever since the time dorned
but now it's time to say goodbye
to all the memories we've kept alive
for all these years.

In this life time so strong
learn lessons that goes beyond
the love, love of the human heart
so I wish upon your wishing star
with happy tears.

Send your love to me
sadly but unspoken it's free
give your love to me
lonely but unspoken it's free
unspoken it's free
with the candles blowing in the wind
it's slowly burning out
empty but unspoken it's free.

It's not a sin to cry
it's just a way of trying
to get our lifes to move on
sadly it never helps against wrongs
believe I've tried.

Cry your love to me
orfull but unspoken it's free
whipe your love to me
senseless but unspoken it's free
unspoken it's free
with the candles blowing in the wind
it's slowly burning out
empty but unspoken it's free.

© Copyright 2001 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-08-02 05:09 PM


Well done here Hall. Not my fav, but still a good read.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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2 posted 2001-08-04 04:24 PM


I LOVED the last stanza.. you ended this very strong.  I really liked it.  nicely done.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

bOoGaSuGa
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since 2001-08-03
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3 posted 2001-08-04 04:45 PM


this was a good poem
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