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Snooganzmeister32
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0 posted 2001-07-30 01:35 PM


Yes, I have been on here for a while- Just in another room...

Last Night

I sat with the one I love last night,
She sang to me an olden strain;
In former times it woke delight,
   Last night--but pain.

Last night we saw the stars arise,
But clouds soon dimmed the ether blue;
And when we sought each other's eyes
   Tears dimmed them too!

We paced along our favorite walk,
But paced in silence broken-hearted:
Of old we used to smile and talk;
   Last night--we parted.

© Copyright 2001 Sarah - All Rights Reserved
Spice
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1 posted 2001-07-30 02:01 PM


Oh Sarah- That was so sad....
I'm sorry about that...Heartbreak kills.
This flowed really well though, and the emotion was captured wonderfully.  Can't wait to see more.  

[This message has been edited by Spice (edited 07-30-2001).]

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2 posted 2001-07-30 02:33 PM


This was really awesome. I loved this poem. So sad, so full of raw emotion. I loved it. I hope to see your work here more.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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3 posted 2001-07-30 02:50 PM


This was a very nice poem, very emotional.  Thanx for the read!
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4 posted 2001-07-30 04:00 PM


Sarah,
Very good poem here...very emotional.  Heartbreak is hard and I hope things are better or at least getting there...I hope to see more of your work in here!!
~Nikki~

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

Snooganzmeister32
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5 posted 2001-07-30 05:26 PM


Just F.Y.I. all! That wasnt from a personal experiance!
mistic
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6 posted 2001-07-30 06:44 PM


this is filled with lots of emotion... I liked it. thanks for sharing and keep writing
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7 posted 2001-08-04 02:05 PM


Oh wow.. this is very sad.  I really enjoyed this.. I'm glad it wasn't from personal experience, as this is a hard thing to go through.  Thanks for sharing this.. nicely done!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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