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The Love Poem |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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Can you stand our silence? my heart is aching for all I can't give you Am I crazy to think everything is falling away My tears fall as I write my heart to you The love I feel is undying yet it hurts more to know all the pain I've caused you I try to pour my heart out too you, I want to yet it hurts to much for me why does it hurt? The tears soak through this paper, I cant take this distance anymore If god was forgiving if he existed we wouldnt be apart I wouldnt be writing in pain for our arms would be wrapped around each others bodies but what i wouldnt give to see your face close to mine to feel your warmth your strength your love i want you to know is that i love you with an undying love, can you still whisper to me your love words? Regina If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive. |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
I love how this reads...every line break is so well thought out..and the emotions in your words are amazing...I really liked this and oh yeah and the lines about god being forgiving and then existing at all  i like how you show a sense of increasing desperation and loss of hope I REALLY REALLY LIKED THIS |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed the poem Regi. A nice poem here! You did quite well on it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Great poem here...I agree the line breaks totally make the each line stand out on its own. Thanks for sharing! ~Nikki~ It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. it's different reading a love poem from you. This isn't my fav. from you.. somewhere around the middle it started getting confusing.. words were repeated in a confusing way, but in the end it came together nicely. Good job, I enjoyed this. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
sounds good regi |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
someone's definitely in love  I just sit here waiting for someone to share words like that to me  Well, maybe in the future beautiful words Ina, I loved it thanks for sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Allysa, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Ma |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
great poem very well written. robin bye lizzy,javi,acire,cherish,SEA,vicky,laura,andrea,jessa and anyone else i forgot i will be back to torment you soon muhahahahahahaha |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
A change of pace from you regina, nonetheless, I still enjoyed the read. You should try more love poems. You have a knack for dark as well. OK I can't actually think of anything to reply to this with so I'll just say good work and I look forward to more. ~AF~ "Hi there, can I relay a sonnet your way?" |
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