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Kevin
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0 posted 2001-07-29 07:58 PM


Amber glow
Clouded haze
Lying low
Counting days
Sudden calm
Music motion
In my palm
I hold devotion
Ease the stress
With four leaf clovers
Self confess
Then pass it over

[This message has been edited by Kevin (edited 07-29-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-07-29 10:23 PM


i liked this one, it was sweet and flowed nice.

fall hard, practice harder not to fall
Don't belong, Don't exist, Don't give a S***, Don't ever judge me  -Slipknot
death is certain, life is not
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2 posted 2001-07-30 01:01 AM


I really liked the style in this one. An awesome poem right here. These are my fav. kinds because they are so deep in my eyes.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Master
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3 posted 2001-07-30 01:15 PM


MMMMMmmm.... four-leaf clovers...! Enjoyed
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4 posted 2001-08-04 02:16 AM


VERY awesome poem... beautiful and powerful in its simplicity.  This is one that I could read over and over, and just think about for a long time.  I really like this.  Nicely done!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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5 posted 2001-08-04 03:13 AM


i liked the flow
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6 posted 2001-08-04 01:41 PM


You really had a nice flow in there. The symbolism of it all is thought provoking. The title, however...I don't know how it fits into the poem. *scratches head* hmmm...
Anyways, I enjoyed the read! Thanks.  

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

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