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Alyssa
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IM ENGAGED!!!!!

0 posted 2001-07-29 07:40 PM


To the One I love
I swear, you were sent from above
I hear your voice, and everything else just goes.
Your voice, so sensual, is all I know.
Your touch is electricty to my brain.
So seducing, I almost go insane.
The words you use change my mood.
So sweet and cute, spoken to soothe.
When I look into your eyes
I have to take a deep breathe and hope it aint a lie
I think about our future, just me and you.
and i hope all our dreams do come true.
Im smiling on the outside
im trying to stay focused on the brightside
I cant wait till i move
to Illinios to start my life with you
till then Ill stay focused on keepin it real
but we have to make a deal
If you say you love me, and you change your mind
you have to tell me, dont waste anytime
what i feel for you will always be true
and I'll love you more, each day that starts new
welp...that one is ...undecided..i cant decide if i like it or not?! do u?

"I have no never-again, I have no always"
Pablo Nerudo

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1 posted 2001-07-29 08:48 PM


I like this alot...Not exactly my favorite of your posts- but still it's very sweet. You sound so happy. Thanks for the read.  
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2 posted 2001-07-29 10:28 PM


the flow was nice...the feelings were there...and you expressed it VERY well...i hope all goes swell...
ahhh.. *your ryms are like..umm interfereing me as i reply*...hehe...bye Alyssa

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3 posted 2001-07-30 01:02 AM


Well done here, and although it was my fav it was still a nice poem.  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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allie
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4 posted 2001-07-30 03:44 AM


I really enjoyed this post...

Good work, and on such a nice topic

ALLIE

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5 posted 2001-08-04 02:12 AM


It's not your best, but I like this... very sweet!  Thanks for sharing.. Nicely done.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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