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Memory Lingering |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Lingering at my lips. The softness of your hair Beneath my fingertips. The memory of your scent Lingering in the air around. The way you held my hand All the me in you I’ve found. The memory of your touch Lingering on my face. The sweetness of the kiss That night in our special place. The memory of you Is always here with me Lingering in everything Reminding me how you’ve set me free. --------------------- This is bad...I don't really like this poem at all. The flow seems off in several places, and in some places I kind of had to force the rhymes, I think...bleh, I can't think straight right now. I'm sick with some kind of bug...sore throat, earache, headache..and general feeling crummy.  This thing isn't worthy of Jess...sorry chica *hugs* I'm gonna try another one.   -Kosetsu "Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Well I liked it  - Me "Blood Moon" |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Sweetheart ~ I loved it. Love you... *hugs&kisses*What don't kill you can only make you stronger... |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
This was really sweet..im glad you 2 are enjoying yourselves.. ~Jeff~ |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
God you too make me sick...LOL ...I'm kidding.... ~*~Jealous Jess #1~*~ lol Another sweet write here.  |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Lol..sorry Jesa. You two could share me..but I think Jess might fight you for me.  -Kosetsu "Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
hahhahahhaa.....you playa you!!!!....this is really sweet...once again...this love business is really getting you writing huh adam?!...dont worry i enjoyed this poem muchly..  "Killer in me is a killer in you, my love |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
This was awesome.. great work, as usual! *bump* ~Jeff~ "Smoking kills. If you're killed, you've lost a very important part of your life." -Brooke Shields [This message has been edited by JBaker515 (edited 07-28-2001).] |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
If shes too good for this poem shes even more amazing than the poem... Fabulous ... ALLIE |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Yeah Allie...Jess is amazing. Utterly amazing is the best way to describe her without going into a 20 page ramble about how incredible she is. *hugs Jess* -Kosetsu Of all the things that I confess, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I don't think Jess#1 would need to fight for u....she's got me heheAnyhow, I thought this was sweet.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was very beautiful, Adam. I relaly liked this.. the beginning was very strong, and the poem ended very strong. Jess loved it, I'm sure --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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