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Kosetsu
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0 posted 2001-07-27 04:38 PM


Sometimes,
I feel the pain of
Dishonesty
Like icy rain

And I
can’t wait
Til I am free
Of all this endless pain
Of these red blood stains.

It’s tearing me apart
And it seems I’m falling down
Down into the clay
But lately I
Am starting to realize
That they can’t kick me down.

Whatever they throw at me
I’ll stand tall
I won’t let them kick me down..no..

Whatever they throw at me
I’ll stand tall…
I’ll stand tall…

So if I
Decide its time to go
Use my chance to take
The dive
Will I
Choose to take the plunge
And find I’m still alive?

It’s tearing me apart
And it seems it’s meant to be
That everyone else’ll be alright
But lately I’m
Starting to realize
That it’s time to stand and fight.

Whatever they throw at me
I’ll stand tall…
I won’t let them kick me down...no

Whatever they throw at me,
I’ll stand tall…
I’ll stand tall…

Would you choose to stand and fight,
Wait for a chance to strike?

Whatver they throw at me
I’ll stand tall
I won’t let them kick me down…no

Whatever they throw at me
I’ll stand tall…
I’ll stand tall…

I’ll stand tall…
I’ll stand tall…

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Turned out pretty good, no? It isn't perfect..and a little too close to the actual song, but I still think it turned out all right. Someone on here did an adaptation of a Linkin Park song (sorry I can't remember your name, cool person >_<), and it inspired me to do this one.

-Kosetsu

"Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown

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1 posted 2001-07-27 05:48 PM


I really love the song u chose to do...incubus rocks   good job!!
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2 posted 2001-07-27 06:36 PM


incubus are prettty cooool, and sugarhigh - do you like the film empire records as much as me? its great!!
Ina
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3 posted 2001-07-27 07:04 PM


Icubus is the best. I love those guys. true real music. awesome work Adam.


Regina

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4 posted 2001-07-27 10:02 PM


Adam ~ This was good. You could try to change it just a little though, make it sound MORE original. But don't change it too much!!      Love ya, hon!

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

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5 posted 2001-07-28 02:11 AM


i love this song..the original..but you did pretty darn good on this one too...i enjoyed it very much... ..hahaha now i got that song stuck in my head...*bonks adam with her mouse*... ...enjoyed the read thanks
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6 posted 2001-07-28 03:17 AM


I really enjoyed it...

i also love incubus...

Nice read for sure!

ALLIE

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7 posted 2001-07-28 07:14 PM


WOW

"I have no never-again, I have no always"
Pablo Neruda

[This message has been edited by Alyssa (edited 07-28-2001).]

Isabel Galaxia
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8 posted 2001-07-28 10:46 PM



That was me!!
Haha, no really, at least the one to "Place for My Head"
This was great! I love it.  It's not too close to the song either.  
Good job!

Bel

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9 posted 2001-07-29 01:04 PM


This was written nicely! I enjoyed it a lot!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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10 posted 2001-07-29 06:41 PM


Great write.  It makes me want to d/l the song and listen to it.
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11 posted 2001-08-04 01:15 AM


Very strong words, and a powerful message, Adam.  I Really enjoyed this.. especially the repitition.  Worked very nicely with what was going on.  Nicely done!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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