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Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2001-07-27 08:46 AM

Sitting on a bench in a park with my girl
Holding kissing fooling round, feeling like
Romeo and Juliet in Shakespeare’s poetry world.
Walking through the avenues and streets
Soaking wet laughing together, girl grab your
Umbrella and lets sing in the rain just you and me.

Before I go to sleep
I wonder how you feel,
Wonder if your lonely,
Before I go to sleep
I always think of you,
Think of your eyes so blue,
Before I go to sleep.

A cop of coffee on a Thursday afternoon
Sitting talking telling jokes, with my friends
The clock’s all most striking 3 so I will call you soon.
Laying by the fire holding you in my arms
Looking into your sweet eyes, through the night
My head’s on your chest feeling the beats of your heart

Before I go to sleep
I wonder how you feel,
Wonder if your lonely,
Before I go to sleep
I always think of you,
Think of your eyes so blue,
Before I go to sleep.

Watch the ducks swim in the lake
With you by my side
On this snowy and cold morning
Sitting on the bench just wasting time.
With you.

Before I go to sleep
I wonder how you feel,
Wonder if your lonely,
Before I go to sleep
I always think of you,
Think of your eyes so blue,
Before I go to sleep.

JBaker515

Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

1 posted 2001-07-27 11:56 AM

This was intersting, and i loved it.
The story was pretty neat, and it had a good flow do it.
SOrta orginal.
Great work!

~Jeff~

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

2 posted 2001-07-27 01:54 PM

This was a nice one Hallucination. Very song-ish (is it a song or a poem?). Anyway, I loved it.

-Kosetsu

"Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown

angel_2401
Member

since 2001-06-12

Posts 131
Cincinnati, OH

3 posted 2001-07-28 05:40 PM

I think this is sweet. I also want to know, is it a song or a poem? Great one though!

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

I'm a nobody, nobody is perfect, therefore I'm perfect.

~Dark Angel~
New Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 5

4 posted 2001-07-29 12:44 PM

i like dis poem, its cute, romantic and it's not about heartbreak !!!!
=)

katherine
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since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

5 posted 2001-07-29 05:59 AM

this is cute and kinda sweet.
It's good to read happy poems.

katie

"by takeing no risks you are really risking everything"
Vic's RE book

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-07-29 12:43 PM

Well done here Hall. I enjoyed it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-08-04 12:26 PM

This was well written. I ESPECIALLY liked the first stanza, where you're talking about feeling like Romeo and Juliet. Very nicely done!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

Cinderelly
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since 2001-12-31

Posts 189
NM, USA

8 posted 2002-01-23 12:42 PM

Aw! Great writing, wonderful poem!

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

9 posted 2002-01-24 05:03 PM

I liked this poem a lot...thought u did a good job on it...keep em comin!

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

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